Template:Did you know nominations/Louder (Neon Jungle song)

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The result was: promoted by 97198 (talk) 12:36, 22 September 2014 (UTC)

Louder (Neon Jungle song) edit

  • ... that "Louder" by Neon Jungle features the four girls singing in a giant metallic dome?

5x expanded by Launchballer (talk). Self nominated at 09:50, 15 August 2014 (UTC).

  • Article was 5x expanded in time. Article is stable, no obvious bias or tags. Offline source for hook accepted in good faith. I don't think the hook is particularly 'hooky', but whatevs. What concerns me is how the hook assumes the reader knows how said four girls relate to Neon jungle. I mean, I guessed they were the band members (as would most people), but I think you should reword the hook to clarify this (i.e 'features the four female band members', or 'features the all-girl group' etc). Not clarifying they are the band members doesn't work as a a good tease hook in my opinion, if that's what you were going for, it's just a little confusing. Freikorp (talk) 11:26, 21 September 2014 (UTC)
ALT1 ... that "Louder" features Neon Jungle singing in a giant metallic dome?--Launchballer 18:30, 21 September 2014 (UTC)
ALT1 Good to go. Freikorp (talk) 10:08, 22 September 2014 (UTC)