- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 21:28, 5 June 2014 (UTC)
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Hedda Vernon edit
... that the German silent film actress Hedda Vernon (pictured) had a film series named after her?
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5x expanded by Skr15081997 (talk). Self nominated at 11:18, 20 May 2014 (UTC).
5x expansion verified. New enough, long enough, adequately referenced, no close paraphrasing seen. QPQ done. Image is pd. The last paragraph under Career needs at least one citation per Rule D2. Also, the hook is a little bland. The part about her playing a 15-year-old seems much more hooky. Yoninah (talk) 23:50, 21 May 2014 (UTC)
- I have added inline citations in the paragraph.
- ALT1 ... that German silent film actress Hedda Vernon (pictured) was 28 years old when she played the role of a 15 year old girl in a film?--Skr15081997 (talk) 03:04, 22 May 2014 (UTC)
- Thank you. Cites in place, and hook ref AGF (although I can make out the German source) and cited inline. I think the way you wrote in the article was better, though:
- ALT2: ... that in the film Zofia, German silent film actress Hedda Vernon (pictured) played the role of a 15-year-old girl, although she was 28 years old at the time? Yoninah (talk) 10:44, 22 May 2014 (UTC)
- @Yoninah: Actually I didn't wanted to mention the name of the film since we don't have the article about the film.--Skr15081997 (talk) 11:00, 22 May 2014 (UTC)
- ALT3: ... that German silent film actress Hedda Vernon (pictured) once played the role of a 15-year-old girl, although she was 28 years old at the time? Yoninah (talk) 14:39, 22 May 2014 (UTC)
- @Yoninah: The above hook will do.Skr15081997 (talk) 02:17, 23 May 2014 (UTC)
As I'm not able to review my own hook, could another reviewer sign off on this? Another reviewer could decide between ALT1 and ALT3, though personally I can't understand what's wrong with ALT2. There's nothing wrong with mentioning a film that doesn't yet have an article, and it makes the hook juicier. Yoninah (talk) 09:14, 23 May 2014 (UTC)
