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The result was: promoted by 97198 (talk) 03:35, 22 July 2014 (UTC)

Grand Slam (PBA) edit

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~~...that the achievement made by Philippine Basketball Association teams who won all three tournaments in a season is called a Grand Slam?~~

ALT1:...that there are only five instances in Philippine Basketball Association history that a team won the Grand Slam?
Reviewed: 2014 PBA Governors' Cup

5x expanded by WayKurat (talk). Self nominated at 15:20, 14 July 2014 (UTC).

ALT2 ~~...that the Philippine Basketball Association's Grand Slam has been won only five times?~~ EEng (talk) 03:15, 15 July 2014 (UTC)

Good to go. New enough, large enough, sources and content check out. I like ALT 2 as being just a tad more interesting hook. Schmidt, ^{Michael Q.} 06:17, 15 July 2014 (UTC)

MichaelQSchmidt, did you check the sources for close paraphrasing? Yoninah (talk) 23:44, 16 July 2014 (UTC)

Yoninah, I have revised the article that has a most likely close paraphrasing sentences. Kindly check MichaelQSchmidt if it is now OK. -WayKurat (talk) 02:50, 19 July 2014 (UTC)

I did a thorough copyedit on the grammar, and also added "cite needed" tags to several paragraphs. According to DYK rules, there needs to be at least one cite per paragraph to qualify. I didn't see close paraphrasing in the sources I checked, but I didn't check all of them. BTW, I was unable to find any of the information in the third paragraph under "1996 Alaska Milkmen" in footnote 7. Yoninah (talk) 21:57, 20 July 2014 (UTC)

I already attached the sources for those paragraphs in question and removed one that was more trivial. Kindly check Yoninah if it is now ok. -WayKurat (talk) 01:13, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
Regarding the third paragraph of 1996 Alaska Milkmen section, footnote 7 actually has three pages. The information mentioned in the third paragraph is located in the third page of the source. -WayKurat (talk) 01:32, 21 July 2014 (UTC)

Thank you for adding the cites and pointing out what I missed in footnote 7. I overlooked one paragraph (the first paragraph under "2013–14 San Mig Super Coffee Mixers" that also needs a cite. The more I look at the sources, the more I see how well you avoided close paraphrasing. Thanks, Yoninah (talk) 09:01, 21 July 2014 (UTC)

*Okay, done adding with the sources. Hopefully this will be enough. :) -WayKurat (talk) 10:19, 21 July 2014 (UTC)

Great, we are set. The original hook and ALT2 are written too passively. I prefer ALT1, but would write it this way:
ALT3: ... that only five times in Philippine Basketball Association history did a team win the Grand Slam?
ALT3 hook refs verified and cited inline. ALT3 good to go. Yoninah (talk) 12:16, 21 July 2014 (UTC)