- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:04, 29 October 2017 (UTC)
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Eleanor Nathan edit
- ... that Eleanor Nathan was a member of the London County Council for two different parties and two different districts [for a total of 16 years]?
- ALT1:... that Eleanor Nathan was the first chairwoman of the London County Council [from 1947 to 1948]?
Created by PatGallacher (talk) and SoWhy (talk). Nominated by SoWhy (talk) at 09:03, 20 October 2017 (UTC).
- Article created 19 October by PatGallacher and expanded 20 October by SoWhy. Length is sufficient (at over 1900 characters). Article is fully cited and there doesn't appear to be any close paraphrasing (although I couldn't access all of the Google books to check). QPQ has been done. The hooks are sourced and within criteria. I don't like ALT1, it seems a little clunky to me; ALT2 is OK but I think the years at the end are superfluous. I was wondering if there was a way to combine the hooks to make it a bit catchier:
- ... that the first chairwoman of London County Council, the Labour Party's Eleanor Nathan, previously represented the Liberal Party on the council? - Dumelow (talk) 12:08, 22 October 2017 (UTC)
- Sounds good to me. Regards SoWhy 13:37, 22 October 2017 (UTC)
I think the rules require someone else to review my alternative hook as I proposed it, so I will put it on hold for now and request another review. Thanks - Dumelow (talk) 16:54, 22 October 2017 (UTC)
- Will do. Let me take a look at the article also. (Dumelow, I have the other nom on my mind, but there's no rush, as it will not be pictured that date, so I guess later is better.) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 22:20, 27 October 2017 (UTC)
Building on the review: interesting politics ;) - I'll leave it to the prep builder to choose, but recomment to shorten the original and ALT1 if chosen, to be snappier. - Minor wishes for the article: The obituary mentions "Jewish affairs", - a little bit more would be nice. I assume Natyan is a typo. I'd give the daughter just her given name, not her married name when she is just born. Can the sentence about "first but after" be clarified, perhaps by splitting? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 22:30, 27 October 2017 (UTC)
- Sounds good to me. Regards SoWhy 13:37, 22 October 2017 (UTC)
