- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by 97198 (talk) 10:47, 22 January 2019 (UTC)
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Cemile Timur edit
... that Cemile Timur coaches a recently to the Turkish Women's First League promoted football club, she founded in 2008 and played for?
Source: "Cemile was 18 when she founded the team in April 2008.", "She is also the oldest player of the team" [1], "Antrenör Cemile Timur, ..." (in Turkish) [2], "... Kadınlar 1. Futbol Ligi’ne yükselen Hakkarigücü Spor ..." (in Turkish) [3]
- Reviewed: Melissa Antunes
Created by CeeGee (talk). Self-nominated at 12:44, 1 January 2019 (UTC).
Just a drive-by-comment: I haven't looked at the article in detail but I think the hook is a bit confusing and hard to follow. Perhaps you could rewrite the hook so that it presented in a clearer and more concise way? I'll try to see if I can think of some ideas. Thanks, --SkyGazer 512 Oh no, what did I do this time? 00:30, 7 January 2019 (UTC)
- Here is another similar hook I can think of:
- ALT1:
... that Cemile Timur is the founder and a coach for Hakkarigücü Spor, which plays in the Turkish Women's First League?
- ALT1:
- --SkyGazer 512 Oh no, what did I do this time? 00:37, 7 January 2019 (UTC)
- OK. I agree. Thanks. CeeGee 04:28, 7 January 2019 (UTC)
Requesting a new reviewer to see if ALT1 will work. Because I was the one who proposed ALT1 and I have some doubts of its interestingness, I don't want to approve this myself, but I'd be happy to continue to participate in this discussion. I also might try to think of some more hooks.--SkyGazer 512 Oh no, what did I do this time? 15:20, 7 January 2019 (UTC)
- I found it interesting that you find your own hook not interesting. CeeGee 10:28, 8 January 2019 (UTC)
- @CeeGee: Well, the primary reason I proposed a new hook was to make it flow better than the original while keeping the overall topic the same. I'm not completely sure it's not interesting enough, but that I would rather have someone else decide. I will try to think of more hooks. I do wish we could somehow incorporate that she's played with the club into the hook, but I can't think of the way to do so while still making it flow well.--SkyGazer 512 Oh no, what did I do this time? 13:43, 8 January 2019 (UTC)
- ALT2: ... that Cemile Timur founded, played in, and now manages Hakkarigücü Spor, a team in the Turkish Women's First League? Mary Mark Ockerbloom (talk) 19:34, 20 January 2019 (UTC)
- @Mary Mark Ockerbloom: Thanks; that's exactly the kind of hook I was looking for. I don't see any issue with ALT2. Courtesy pinging CeeGee.--SkyGazer 512 Oh no, what did I do this time? 21:32, 20 January 2019 (UTC)
This article is new enough and long enough. The facts for ALT2 hook are cited inline (I changed the word "coaches" to manages because that's what the article states), the article is neutral and I detected no copyright issues. A QPQ has been done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 09:18, 21 January 2019 (UTC)
