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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:08, 28 September 2017 (UTC)

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  • ... that the Homeopathic Free Dispensary, opened in 1882 by Caroline B. Winslow, was the first facility in Washington, D.C., where women doctors could practice side-by-side to their male colleagues? Source: Moldow, Gloria (1987). Women Doctors in Gilded-age Washington: Race, Gender, and Professionalization. University of Illinois Press. p. 12 and 77 ([1])

Created by Elisa.rolle (talk). Self-nominated at 11:24, 26 August 2017 (UTC).

  • Comment: At 235 characters, the hook is 35 characters over the maximum allowable length. --Usernameunique (talk) 12:55, 26 August 2017 (UTC)
Interesting life, on good sources, no copyvio obvious. - I may have language problems, not sure about dispensary / pharmacy: is that a place where doctors work? - I have some questions regarding the article:
  • Dispensary was the term used at the time, it means a place where medicine were distributed, but also a place where doctors consulted... anyway that is the name of the place they opened, therefore cannot be changed.
  • Do we have a name for her mother who - according to a source - was married to her father for more than fifty years?
  • Nope sorry.
  • Her name, - she was Brown for a while, certainly when she married, becoming Winslow only then, right?
  • As per another editor editing, I use the maiden name for the Early life, when she is not married, and the married name (with whom she was known), for the Career and Later life.
  • Can the bust image get closer to the bust?
  • If I do that, I sandwich the text, that I know you do not like. The bust is anout her as a feminist and a primer in her career, so in this case I think it's a fair compromize to have it at the beginning of the Career section
  • Can you check for sentences with a load of commas, like the first under Career? Another: "Besides her work in medicine, she did much in other fields, especially in the Moral Education Society of Washington, of which she was president for fourteen years."
  • I remove some of them.
  • Image caption "Caroline B. Winslow, A woman of the century" is unclear.
  • Changed
  • "She came to the United States with her family in 1826." - She was four, so probably the family came.
  • Changed
  • no "Dr."
  • Changed
  • "They probably met at College, having attended the same school." - sounds to me like they could have met at school, no?
  • Changed
Thank you very much! What do you think of rewording (active voice, not an old-fashioned term at the beginning):
ALT1: ... that Caroline B. Winslow opened the Homeopathic Free Dispensary, the first facility in Washington, D.C., where women doctors could practice side-by-side to their male colleagues? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 06:43, 30 August 2017 (UTC)
ALT1 — Preceding unsigned comment added by Gerda Arendt (talk • contribs) 07:50, 30 August 2017 (UTC)
  • Sorry, the language here comes too close to being promotional for me. Stuff like "She received a good education" and "she practiced homeopathy very successfully" are verging on puffery, and need to be fixed, as do the grammatical errors. Vanamonde (talk) 06:35, 23 September 2017 (UTC)
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