Template:Did you know nominations/CNN Checkout Channel
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The result was: promoted by PanydThe muffin is not subtle 12:59, 7 August 2015 (UTC)
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CNN Checkout Channel edit
- ... that CNN was involved in a failed television news channel for supermarket checkout lines?
- Reviewed: Charles Larimore Jones
5x expanded by ViperSnake151 (talk). Self-nominated at 06:51, 21 July 2015 (UTC).
Expansion dates check out, length more than adequate for 5x expansion (1094 to 6201 characters of readable prose), citations are solid, tone is neutral, grammar is good, and prose appears free of close paraphrasing issues. Hook is interesting, inline sourcing supports the idea, and the (properly sourced) pieces all add up but the article lacks a direct statement of the hook fact. That's all that stands between this nomination and a green check mark. - Dravecky (talk) 05:32, 22 July 2015 (UTC)
- The fact that CNN was involved with the channel is already cited, and the fact that it failed is also already cited (see the citations of Turner announcing its closure). ViperSnake151 Talk 15:52, 22 July 2015 (UTC)
- As I noted, the hook is a fine synthesis of properly cited facts spread across the article, but I was looking for a clean cited statement. One other quibble, the wordpair "grocery store" does not appear in the article. Either the article should be updated to include "grocery store" or the hook should be altered to use "supermarket" as the article does. - Dravecky (talk) 16:10, 22 July 2015 (UTC)
- Where I live, the term "grocery store" is synonymous with "supermarket", but anyway. As an alternative:
- ALT1 ... that supermarket cashiers complained that the CNN Checkout Channel was too distracting?
- ViperSnake151 Talk 02:25, 23 July 2015 (UTC)
It's no accident that supermarket and grocery store each have their own Wikipedia articles so I'm happy to see the update to the primary hook. Both hooks are now good to go. That said, I have a strong preference for ALT1 as it's far less negative towards the subject of the article. Whoever promotes this is free to choose but I'm hopeful they'll consider my recommendation. - Dravecky (talk) 05:08, 23 July 2015 (UTC)
- The fact that CNN was involved with the channel is already cited, and the fact that it failed is also already cited (see the citations of Turner announcing its closure). ViperSnake151 Talk 15:52, 22 July 2015 (UTC)
