Template:Did you know nominations/Berdjoang

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The result was: promoted by PumpkinSky talk 02:02, 28 September 2012 (UTC)

Berdjoang edit

Created/expanded by Crisco 1492 (talk). Self nom at 10:37, 21 September 2012 (UTC)

  • The article has been created recently, is over 1500 characters long, cites sources, complies with NPOV, and is free of copyvios. The hook is interesting and is immediately followed in the prose by a inline citation from a reliable source. Electric Catfish2 20:06, 21 September 2012 (UTC)
  • I can't be certain what is meant by "their" in the hook, combined with "in the Dutch East Indies". And if it isn't clear to me who "they" are, it won't be to the DYK audience. Please come up with an ALT hook. BlueMoonset (talk) 04:33, 24 September 2012 (UTC)
  • Maybe "made in the Dutch East Indies"? It's that they produced and filmed a full-length propaganda film there that makes it unique, right? Or is there something else at work here, like maybe the only local-language feature? BlueMoonset (talk) 18:54, 27 September 2012 (UTC)
  • It was, in short, the only domestically produced feature-length film during the occupation. That's a little overly specific for the hook, though. How's this new one? — Crisco 1492 (talk) 19:37, 27 September 2012 (UTC)
  • Rewritten hook approved; fact is supported by inline citation, and rest of article approved per review by Electric Catfish. BlueMoonset (talk) 20:51, 27 September 2012 (UTC)