Template:Did you know nominations/Benjamin Steinberg (conductor)
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The result was: promoted by Anarchyte (work | talk) 11:47, 4 August 2018 (UTC)
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Benjamin Steinberg (conductor)
edit- ... that Benjamin Steinberg, a violinist in the NBC Symphony Orchestra with Arturo Toscanini, started the first racially integrated symphony orchestra in America, the Symphony of the New World, in 1965? Source: New York Times, January 30, 1974
Created by JGHowes (talk). Self-nominated at 14:36, 14 July 2018 (UTC).
Interesting life, on good sources, no copyvio obvious. Article and hook: I don't like "under" for the player-conductor relationship, how about "with" or "conducted by". I understand "first violin" as all playing in the section (vs. "second violin", while "principal violin" is the section leader, no? You could also say "concert master". Hook: please remove "legendary" (won't make a reader click) but add "racially", - simly "integrated" told me nothing, and I may not be the only one. How about a (piped) link to the orchestra? - Article:
- A header for a one-sentence paragraph seems too much of a good thing.
- Please reduce adjectives such as "famed".
- Please have one ref minimum per paragraph.
- How do you feel about an infobox?
- You will have to supply a qpq review. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 11:48, 16 July 2018 (UTC)
DYK hook revised JGHowes talk 02:59, 17 July 2018 (UTC)
- Fine. Waiting for more ;) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 14:37, 17 July 2018 (UTC)
- Done Have gone thru article and modified/expanded. JGHowes talk 03:00, 18 July 2018 (UTC)
- Thanks for the expansion. Getting closer, but we still have unreferenced paragraphs, and you'll need to review another article from the nominations. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 08:00, 18 July 2018 (UTC)
- Done! Thanks, Gerda Arendt, for your helpful comments. JGHowes talk 01:37, 19 July 2018 (UTC)
- Good, thank you, I could find out which, but kindly link it here, for others to check. Did you think about "principal" versus "first" violin? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 14:17, 19 July 2018 (UTC)
- It was changed to Concertmaster as you suggested and your edit makes it clear. The qpq link is here - JGHowes talk 15:22, 19 July 2018 (UTC)
- I meant "first" in the hook ;) - Thank you for the review of Template:Did you know nominations/Interstate 86 (Idaho)!
Spanish sources accepted AGF, you decide first vs. principal ;) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 15:32, 19 July 2018 (UTC)
- It was changed to Concertmaster as you suggested and your edit makes it clear. The qpq link is here - JGHowes talk 15:22, 19 July 2018 (UTC)
- Good, thank you, I could find out which, but kindly link it here, for others to check. Did you think about "principal" versus "first" violin? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 14:17, 19 July 2018 (UTC)
- Done! Thanks, Gerda Arendt, for your helpful comments. JGHowes talk 01:37, 19 July 2018 (UTC)
- Thanks for the expansion. Getting closer, but we still have unreferenced paragraphs, and you'll need to review another article from the nominations. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 08:00, 18 July 2018 (UTC)
- Fine. Waiting for more ;) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 14:37, 17 July 2018 (UTC)
