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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by The Squirrel Conspiracy (talk) 20:16, 1 January 2016 (UTC)

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Created by Human3015 (talk). Self-nominated at 07:12, 26 November 2015 (UTC).

Article was written within 7 days of DYK nomination (barely, but in), it's about 1900 characters of prose, and complies with policy. Well-written. Great hook, especially ALT1, but needs a little copyediting how about: "... that the Guardian called the 2015 Bangkok Half Marathon the "world's longest half marathon"? or omit the Guardian and just say, "... that the 2015 Bangkok Half Marathon was called the "world's longest half marathon"? In any case it's a 99th percentile catchy hook and should be able to get through really soon. -- Michael Scott Cuthbert (talk) 21:32, 19 December 2015 (UTC)

  • Thanks Mscuthbert for your review. Based on your suggestion I propose new hook,

There are obviously some more sources who called this half marathon as "longest half marathon" so there is no need to mention Guardian specifically. Thanks for suggestion. --Human3015TALK  15:01, 20 December 2015 (UTC)

  • I made two little grammar copyedits to ALT3 ("the 2015" and "was called the"). Hope that's okay. Good to go for me. -- Michael Scott Cuthbert (talk) 15:19, 20 December 2015 (UTC)
  • First, no approved DYK should have bare URLs for references, per WP:DYKSG#D3. These must be fixed. Second, there are significant issues with the prose in the article: one major one is that the word "the" is missing much of the time when it should be used, much like what was the case with ALT3 before it was copyedited. (For example, sentences start with "Marathon" or "Course", when "The marathon" or "The course" is how they should start.) The intro has additional grammatical issues. The prose needs to markedly improve before the article is ready for the main page; I'm puzzled as to why the original review described it as "well-written", since that does not match what I have read. BlueMoonset (talk) 03:52, 21 December 2015 (UTC)
  • I've just made significant edits to the article, correcting the various distances and standardizing on km first, miles second. I've struck the original hook because its wording isn't quite accurate, ALT1 because it's been replaced by ALT3, and ALT2 because the quote isn't quite right and while the articles say that the race organizers were going to do this, I don't see a source that indicates that the t-shirts were distributed and received by racers. BlueMoonset (talk) 21:38, 28 December 2015 (UTC)
  • New reviewer needed to recheck the entire article and new ALT3 hook; original review had issues. Thanks. BlueMoonset (talk) 21:38, 28 December 2015 (UTC)
  • This article is new enough and long enough. The ALT3 hook is acceptable and has an inline citation. The problems mentioned above have been addressed, the article is neutral, and I detected no copyright issues. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:36, 1 January 2016 (UTC)
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