Template:Did you know nominations/Akhamaman

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:35, 22 August 2017 (UTC)

Akhamaman edit

Created by Hybernator (talk). Self-nominated at 18:07, 6 August 2017 (UTC).

Interesting life, on good sources, Burmese sources accepted AGF, no copyvio obvious. - The hook is catchy. - Please check the article for a few minor things:
  • Some sentences are awfully short, and some repetitious, he ... he.
  • Please repeat his name on the first mentioning of him in a section, also when you talked about other men just before.
Almost there ;) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 16:09, 18 August 2017 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the review, Gerda Arendt. Yeah, too many pronouns could hinder clarity. Just edited the article. See if the issues are adequately addressed. Thanks. Hybernator (talk) 17:37, 19 August 2017 (UTC)
thank you! --Gerda Arendt (talk) 18:10, 19 August 2017 (UTC)