Talk:Zion Williamson/GA1
Latest comment: 5 years ago by Kosack in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 13:51, 2 February 2019 (UTC)
I've started a look at this, will post a review as soon as possible. Kosack (talk) 13:51, 2 February 2019 (UTC)
Initial review
Infobox edit
- The height listed here (6ft 8in) is different to the lead (6ft 7in).
Early life edit
- "When he was 5 years old", MOS:NUMERAL states that numbers lower than ten should be spelled out instead of using digits.
- "Then 9 years ago, at age 9", drop the nine years ago. Definite time spans like this are discouraged as they will become out of date and will very likely be forgotten about. The numeral issue above applies to nine here too.
- 5:00 a.m. > 5 a.m., I don't think the minutes are necessary if they are 0.
Early years edit
- "On August", either there's a date missing from here or it should read in August.
Junior season edit
- "the Bojangles Bracket", I'm not sure what this means. Is it just a sponsor?
- "On January 15, 2017, rapper Drake wore Williamson's jersey in an Instagram post.", I think this could do with more explanation as to why it is notable. Even if it's just something along the lines of "Williamson received nationwide publicity after..."
- "High school sports website named him", what website?
Recruiting edit
- "and the number one player in the 2018 class by recruiting service 247Sports", I think somethings missing from this sentence. "was ranked the number one..." perhaps?
College career edit
- R.J. Barrett is linked in the opening paragraph but is also linked in the previous section. WP:OVERLINK states that repeat links like this should be avoided.
- Same as above with Clemson in the second paragraph.
Personal life edit
- Could this section not be merged into the early life section? All of the info here is either parentage or schooling and occured before his basketball career really starts.
References edit
- Ref 42 returns a server error for me, is the source working for you?
- Other than that, I can't find any issues with the references. Very well formatted.
A nice article overall, not too many issues to sort. The biggest is the personal life section issue I mentioned. Copyvio check comes back clean, only a quote pushes the percentage up, placed on hold for now while issues are addressed. Kosack (talk) 21:00, 2 February 2019 (UTC)
- @Kosack: I have addressed all the issues brought up. However, Ref 42 works for me. Also, I kept the early life and personal life sections separate, because the former only includes personal information relevant to his childhood, while the latter includes information about siblings, his parents' backgrounds and careers, etc that doesn't necessarily relate to his childhood. I have made some additional changes to better reflect this. Wisestork (talk) 22:48, 2 February 2019 (UTC)
- That's fine about ref 42, I had issues with some refs trying to access them from outside the U.S. so I assume it's related to that. In regards to the personal life section, I would typically regard an early life section to contain anything prior to the start of the following section (which usually is about the career that grants the player notability, i.e. his basketball career) and the personal life section to be anything non-sport related that occurred after this point. I would say this is the format supported by FA rated articles, including basketball players. The best comparison I can find would be Juwon Howard which features a substantial amount of info on his parentage. Other FA rated basketball articles generally follow suit although not many have much information included in this at all. Kosack (talk) 08:33, 3 February 2019 (UTC)