Talk:You'll See/GA1

GA Review

Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 02:20, 30 March 2016 (UTC)

Hello, I am Carbrera, and I'll be reviewing this article for possible good article submission.

Full review coming very soon. Carbrera (talk) 02:20, 30 March 2016 (UTC)

Infobox

• The single cover images needs an alt, please add one
• I would prefer you provide the link to the "external music video" add the end of the page in the section "External links", but if you prefer it here, that's fine

Lead

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• Do you need to mention that it is a "ballads" compilation album? You could instead say "second" because I'm pretty sure it was only the one minus "The Immaculate Collection", correct?
• What does it mean to be the "Most Performed Song"?
  • Per below, I don't know what it means exactly because ASCAP does not expands this. Probably in terms of most used/sampled etc. But that's how ASCAP lists it. —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 10:42, 6 April 2016 (UTC)

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• I feel like the use of "whose" in the music video sentence seems out of place; instead, could you say "where the story line served as a sequel to Madonna's previous music video for "Take a Bow"." What do you think of that?
• Instead on "On 2009", please use "In 2009"
  • Good catch. —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 10:42, 6 April 2016 (UTC)

Background and development

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• "career and three new songs. Described as a..." → "career and three new songs; described as a..."
• Should "liner note" be pluralized?

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• Shouldn't "was not 'really [be] hip enough for her'." be changed into "would not 'really [be] hip enough for her'."? With the addition of the [be] in the sentence, it would make more sense to include the "would" instead of the "was", see what I mean?

Recording and composition

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• Shouldn't "process" be removed from the first sentence? Its current placement doesn't make any sense to me
• You mention the "same album", without previously stating what album you're talking about; I know you mean Something to Remember, but you didn't previously state it in this section
• I'd prefer you reword to "...was included as a bonus track on the Latin American editions..."

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• Reword to "...the singer used her vocal lessons from Evita; she said "if you..." please

Critical reception

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• Still, I don't get what it means to be the "Most Performed Song"; plus, this should be moved to the final paragraph in this section as it is mentions a few accolades and their respective reviews, but if you feel it best where it is, then you can leave it as is
• Otherwise, this section is great!

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• I feel like the more "negative" reviews of the song have an awkward placement in this paragraph; should they be moved until the end of the paragraph so it progresses from positive to negative?

Chart performance

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• The first two sentences don't make sense to me; shouldn't it say "It became Madonna's highest debuting of her career, since "Erotica" and "Rescue Me" debuted at lower positions according to the text mentioned? Is this a mistake perhaps?
• "reach" → "reached"

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• Looks good; nothing to add here :)

Promotion and cover

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• Has Madonna released other sequel clips; would "Sorry" and "Hung Up" be the other one as you mentioned? If so, then ignore this comment altogether
• Otherwise good work
  • Yep, "Hung Up" and "Sorry" are the next sequels. —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 10:42, 6 April 2016 (UTC)

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• Again, good

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• I'm a bit confused on who the "latter" is in the final sentence of this paragraph; please clarify

References

• I was going to remind you to double check all of your sources to search for repeats of links to articles, but I only found one; good work!
• [63] - Remove the link to "Ultratop 50"
  • I cannot, since it uses the {{singlechart}} template, where the template links it. —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 10:42, 6 April 2016 (UTC)

End of GA Review:

Another great article IndianBio! Just some minor changes and I'm sure you'll be on top of it once again. I'll put in on hold; thanks again. Carbrera (talk) 00:56, 6 April 2016 (UTC)

@Carbrera: all done and responded. —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 10:42, 6 April 2016 (UTC)

Thank you. I have passed the article. Well done! Carbrera (talk) 01:25, 8 April 2016 (UTC)