Talk:Yeshe-Ö/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 17:21, 30 July 2019 (UTC)

Criteria

GA Criteria
GA Criteria: 1 1.a Y 1.b Y 2 2.a Y 2.b Y 2.c Y 2.d Y (There is an 81.7% match due to an article which mirrors Wikipedia.) 3 3.a Y 3.b Y 4 4.a Y 5 5.a Y 6 6.a Y 6.b Y

• No DAB links Y
• No dead links Y (Although I would strongly suggest using Wayback Machine to archive all the URLs.
• No missing citations N

Discussion

• @QatarStarsLeague: The article is missing citations in two places, please correct this before the review can continue. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 17:21, 30 July 2019 (UTC)
• @QatarStarsLeague: re-pinging as account is active again. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 12:29, 16 August 2019 (UTC)
  • I don't see any "citation needed" tags within the article, could you point me to the two instances? QatarStarsLeague (talk) 18:54, 16 August 2019 (UTC)

    @QatarStarsLeague: apologies, Amitchell125 has gone and added references for them; can proceed. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 22:13, 16 August 2019 (UTC)

    I've made some suggestions and edits, feel free to change my edits and implement any of my suggestions at your leisure. Passing now. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 22:24, 16 August 2019 (UTC)

Prose Suggestions

Please note that all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion.

Lede

Yeshe-Ö was the second king in the succession of the kingdom of Guge in the southwestern Tibetan Plateau. The extent of the kingdom was roughly equivalent to the area of the kingdom Zhangzhung that had existed until the 7th century. suggest Yeshe-Ö was the second king of the kingdom of Guge, located in the southwestern Tibetan Plateau, which was roughly equivalent to the area of the kingdom Zhangzhung that had existed until the 7th century.

Early life and rule

• and ruled the merged the kingdoms of Tashigon and Detsugon, not sure if he ruled the merged kingdoms, or merged the kingdoms he ruled, suggest either and ruled the merged kingdoms of Tashigon and Detsugon or and merged the kingdoms of Tashigon and Detsugon
• pay an endowment fee towards the maintenance of the monastery. was this to their local monastery or some national tax? Suggest elaborating either way.