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Latest comment: 7 years ago by Bob1960evens in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Bob1960evens (talk · contribs) 16:36, 17 July 2017 (UTC)Reply


I will review. I will work through the article, making notes as I go, and return to the lead at the end. Can I suggest that you mark any issues fixed with comments or maybe the   Done template. I am not in favour of using strikethrough, as it makes the text difficult to read at a later date, and it is an important record of the GA process. Bob1960evens (talk) 16:36, 17 July 2017 (UTC)Reply

Route description

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  • ...share a route along majority of Woodhaven... Suggest "...along most of Woodhaven..." or "...along the majority of Woodhaven..."

  Done

  • and extend into the Rockaways Needs a period after Rockaways, but would benefit from some context and a link to Rockaway Peninsula. So: "and extend into the Rockaways, an isolated peninsula in the south-west of Long Island which is popular as a summer retreat." or similar.

  Done

  • and whose southern half was reactivated for rapid transit... Suggest "reactivated" needs clarification. You might mention the fire of 1950 and the bankrupcy of LIRR, which seem to be the main causes.

  Done

Q11
  • it crossed a bridge (no longer present) over Hawtree Creek, Reads awkwardly. Suggest "it crossed a bridge over Hawtree Creek, which has since been removed," or similar.

  Done

Q21
  • Prior to the MTA takeover.... Suggest this should be "MTA Bus Company" and wikilinked here as well as in the lead. If you want to use just MTA later, it should be "MTA Bus Company (MTA)".

  Done

Q52
  • As part of the planned conversion of the route into Select Bus Service... This is a single sentence paragraph. Suggest it could be expanded, with a small amount of information about what Select Bus Service entails.

  Done

Q53
  • the Q53 originally was labeled as an express service. Suggest "the Q53 was originally labeled..." would read better.

  Done

  • Originally operating from the LaGuardia Depot (the former Triboro Coach depot) in East Elmhurst, the Q53 was later operated out of the College Point Depot (the former Queens Surface Corporation facility). Suggest removing the brackets, and incorporating the parenthetical clauses into the sentence more fully.

  Done

Other bus routes
  • where many former Green Lines routes terminate. This sounds awkward, because both Lines and routes are plural. Presumably Green Lines is the same as Green Bus Lines, wikilinked in the next section. If so, it should be Green Bus Lines and wikilinked here on first occurrence. Suggest "which is the terminus for many routes formerly operated by Green Bus Lines, commonly known as Green Lines." or similar.

  Done

Back soon. Bob1960evens (talk) 22:23, 17 July 2017 (UTC)Reply

History

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  • running between Jamaica Avenue (at the Woodhaven Boulevard station of the BMT Jamaica Line)... Suggest replacing brackets with commas.
  • the Q21 became a franchise of Green Bus Lines, "Green Bus Lines" is wikilinked here, but was introduced in the previous paragraph. It should be linked on first occurrence.
  • with the company awarded the rights to all of "Zone C" in southern Queens (including... It is unclear what "Zone C" is. Please clarify, and I suggest removing the brackets around the final phrase.
  • ...which opened that November; this was rejected... There are a lot of short sentences in this section, which breaks up the flow of the text. Suggest "...which opened that November, but this was rejected..."
  • On June 25, Triboro Coach (owned by Green Lines' shareholders)... Again, the flow can be improved by removing the brackets. So: "On June 25, Triboro Coach, a company owned by Green Lines' shareholders, ..."
  • took over the operations of the Green Lines routes, part of the city's takeover These two phrases need linking. Suggest "...Green Lines routes, as part of the city's takeover"
  • the Q53 express was converted into limited-stop service... Suggest "...converted into a limited-stop service..."
  • On September 12, 2010, late night service on the Q11 after midnight was truncated to Pitkin Avenue. This is a single sentence paragraph. Suggest it could be joined to the previous paragraph with a few linking words.
  • to serve the growing "Arverne by the Sea" development. We are left guessing what the "Arverne by the Sea" development is. Can it be expanded a little?
  • For a short period of time after Hurricane Sandy... This, and the next sentence, are both single sentence paragraphs. Suggest amalgamating.
  • (typically assigned to the Q10). It is not obvious what this means. Were the buses normally used on the Q10 route? Clarify.

Select bus service

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  • Bus rapid transit could do with a little bit of background explanation here, rather than relying on the wikilink.
  • The Q52 and Q53 SBS routes... "SBS" is an acronym, and has not been introduced. It should be "Select Bus Service (SBS)" in the previous paragraph. I think I would also replace BRT in "the MTA's brand of BRT service" with "bus rapid transit", to avoid too many abbreviations.
Opposition
  • business owners, have opposed to the Select Bus Service project, Remove spare "to".
  • as evidenced by an op-ed from 2014. What is an op-ed? Clarify.
  • The plan was changed in May 2016 to change his mind, Reads awkwardly. Suggest "In order to accommodate his objections, the plan was changed in May 2016," or similar.
  • to speed up travel times by eliminating the signal time allocated to split phases, This may be understandable to road engineers, but needs a little more explanation for average readers.
  • Local community members are also opposed to the plan... Another single sentence paragraph. Suggest joining to the previous one.
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  • This is a single sentence paragraph and section. Maybe you could add something like: "It includes the lines
Bus ride is too slow
they blast out the disco on the radio"

I will move on to checking the references next. Back soon. Bob1960evens (talk) 07:15, 18 July 2017 (UTC)Reply

References

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  • I have made a preliminary check of the references, and there are a number of issues. These concern:
Multi-page pdf documents, where the page number is not specified: Refs 1 (25p), 3 (20p), 4 (12p), 5 (23p), 9 (56p), 12 (44p), 18 (949p), 19 (133p), 41 (20p), 52 (28p), 54 (41p), 71 (27p), 78 (36p), 80 (6p), 81 (56p), 86 (57p).
  Done
Ref 66 is a book with 310 pages and needs a page number.
  Done
Refs where the link is to a blank page: Refs 11, 21, 28, 48, 54
  Done
Page not available error: Ref 20
  Done
Links to The Wave, which redirect to the July 2017 edition: Refs 22, 30, 32, 42
  Done Ref 42 still outstanding

  Done--Kew Gardens 613 (talk) 00:37, 20 July 2017 (UTC)Reply

Page does not exist error: Refs 45, 73, 79
  Done
Error 404 Page not found: Ref 75

  Done--Kew Gardens 613 (talk) 00:37, 20 July 2017 (UTC)Reply

  • Ref 38. Two-Hour Commutes: The following letter... The link is to a letter dated May 26, 2006, but it displays the letters page for Jan 5, 2007.
  Done Ref altered. Bob1960evens (talk) 08:38, 21 July 2017 (UTC)Reply

I will make a further check against the content of the references when these issues have been addressed. Bob1960evens (talk) 16:09, 18 July 2017 (UTC)Reply

@Bob1960evens: All the issues you have mentioned so far have been addressed. Thank you for doing the review. epicgenius (talk) 19:46, 20 July 2017 (UTC)Reply
@Epicgenius: There are still a number of issues with the refs. I have altered some of the numbers, as the number of refs has decreased by one as a result of the fixes already done. Ref 54 has stopped being a blank page, and now links to a 41p pdf, so has moved to the first list. Bob1960evens (talk) 08:38, 21 July 2017 (UTC)Reply
@Bob1960evens: I have done the page numbers and outdated references now. For some of these, all I had to do was change the deadurl parameter from no to yes. epicgenius (talk) 17:50, 21 July 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • It has been possible to check most of the references, as nearly all of them are available on-line. It has not always been easy to work out which facts are supported by which references, particularly when a relatively short bit of text is supported by 4, 5, 6, 7 or even 8 separate references. In some cases, I have been unable to find the details in a particular reference, but the text as written has been adequately supported by at least one of the ofther refs. There are a few issues.
  • Ref 3(d) Woodhaven / Cross Bay Boulevard (Q52/53) Public Design Workshop... I think the info appears on p.3, and not p.8 as indicated.
  •   Done
  • Ref 9 MTA Bus Operations Committee Meeting March 2012. Page numbers are only supplied for 9(a), and not the following (b) to (e), although I suspect they should all be the same, having looked through the document. I cannot work out whether 9(b) supports any of the text it refers to, but there are 5 other refs for this section.
  •   Done. The b-th occurrence of reference 9 is only used for the route map. It's not to scale, but it basically shows the Q53 going from mainland (Woodhaven Blvd corridor) to the Rockaways.
  • Ref 12 Analysis of Routes and Ridership of a Franchise Bus Service: Green Bus Lines. Not sure that this supports any of the text at 12(c).
  •   Done
  • Ref 22 Goldfeder Asks MTA For Q53 Public Input. This reference debates possible future changes, and is dated 25 May 2012, but 22(b) is used to support the fact that major changes took place on 1 July.
  •   Done since the statement already has sources
  • Ref 23 MTA Q11 Hamilton Beach service change. 23(c) and 22(c) are used to support "Overnight service on the Q11 to Hamilton Beach after 10:00 PM was eliminated due to low ridership on that branch during late nights." 22(c) mentions that bus services will stop after 9:00 pm and 23(c) mentions that this was changed to 10:00 pm, but there is no mention of low risdership that I can see in either ref.
  • Ref 28 MTA Bus Operations Committee Meeting November 2011. This is a 60-page pdf, which got missed in the first trawl, because it originally linked to a blank page. The text is not searchable, so it is particularly difficult to track down what is being referenced without reading the whole article.
  • All the older MTA documents are like that, as the pages were scanned in. Anyway,   Done.
  • I do wonder if some of the references could be trimmed out. The 45 words beginning "the Q53 was originally labeled an express service. It made stops at the Woodside LIRR station..." for instance, is supported by 8 refs. In view of the non-contentious nature of the text, which is describing the location of bus stops, 8 refs seems OTT. This is only a suggestion, and will not cause the failure or otherwise of the GA review.

Lead

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  • The lead should introduce the subject, and summarise the main points of the article. It seems somewhat short for an article of this length. However, in view of the material covered by the text, it actually makes a reasonable attempt at summarising the salient points. One thing that might be worth adding is the fact that select bus service has not been universally welcomed.

  Done – I have expanded it with some history of the routes. Epicgenius mentioned that it has not been universally welcomed.

  • The route map is a splendid addition to the article, making the discussion of routes much easier to follow.

The formal bit

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GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
    See comments above
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
    See comments above
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  
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