Talk:William R. Farrand/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 03:40, 15 May 2020 (UTC)

Criteria

1. Prose ✓ Pass

2. Verifiability ✓ Pass

3. Depth of Coverage ✓ Pass

4. Neutral ✓ Pass

5. Stable ✓ Pass

6. Illustrations ✓ Pass

7. Miscellaneous ✓ Pass

Comments

1.

• "The company was split up in 1897 by the two main partners, Edwin S. Votey and himself." - Is there a way to simplify the phrasing here?

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:29, 16 May 2020 (UTC)

• "He then became the president of the Farrand Organ Company and specialized in manufacturing reed organs" - I think which would be a better word choice than and

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:03, 16 May 2020 (UTC)

• Link reed organ

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:03, 16 May 2020 (UTC)

• "In 1893 the Mayor of Detroit" - Comma after 1893

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:03, 16 May 2020 (UTC)

• "In 1893 the Mayor of Detroit appointed him a member of the public lighting commission and was promoted president in 1897." - A literal interpretation of the clause order would suggest that the Major was promoted to president, can this be rephrased to make it clear the subject is Farrand?

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:08, 16 May 2020 (UTC)

• Link Presbyterian

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:03, 16 May 2020 (UTC)

• "Republican party" - capitalize party and link

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:03, 16 May 2020 (UTC)

2.

• Sources in alphabetical order

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:50, 16 May 2020 (UTC)

• Add ISBN/OCLC where possible, the Junchen book at least has an ISBN.

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:50, 16 May 2020 (UTC)

3.

• "In 1893 the Mayor of Detroit appointed him a member of the public lighting commission and was promoted president in 1897." - Is the mayor's name known?

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:12, 16 May 2020 (UTC)

• Is there information with which his role in the companies can be expanded? He's most notable for that, and it only gets a few paragraphs

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 15:34, 16 May 2020 (UTC)

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@Hog Farm: All issues have been addressed. Can you take a look at it now. Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 15:34, 16 May 2020 (UTC)

Still some ref OCLC stuff that can be added. With some of these older books, the OCLCs are important to identify the exact work. The OCLC for Moore is 657081089, [1]. [[worldcat.org] is very helpful with finding OCLCs for old works. Hog Farm (talk) 17:11, 16 May 2020 (UTC)

@Hog Farm: All OCLCs have been filled in. Thanks for the hint on how to find those on WorldCat. I didn't know.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:19, 16 May 2020 (UTC)

Passing. In my opinion, it meets the GA requirement for coverage (although the previous reviewer seems to disagree). For A-Class or Featured Article, this would need some more information about his business activities, but in my opinion, this meets the GA standards. Hog Farm (talk) 21:41, 16 May 2020 (UTC)