Talk:William Meschin

Latest comment: 4 years ago by David Fuchs in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: David Fuchs (talk · contribs) 17:13, 31 January 2020 (UTC)Reply

{{doing}} Look for comments before the end of the week. Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs talk 17:13, 31 January 2020 (UTC)Reply


Sorry for the delay. It's a short article, but I wanted to do my due diligence and had to hit the stacks for the citations.

Overall, a nice little article. As I am not a medieval scholar, most of my issues revolve around wanting a bit more context for a lay reader.

  • Meschin built Egremont Castle on his lands lands where?
  • Likewise, I'd find it useful to briefly explain what the Earl of Chester is in "Early life".
  • The boys were also nephews of Hugh d'Avranches, who was Earl of Chester.—I assume Hugh was previously Earl of Chester?
  • So I'm guessing there's not really any real scholarship about his life before the First Crusade?
  • What is Gilsland? Carlisle? Without really knowing where these are, the names are kind of meaningless. Later on your provide a little more context for where Allerdale is, which helps, but even adding stuff like "in the south of England"-type things would help orient readers spatially.
  • Katrina Legg argues—who is?
  • A bit of context that confused me was why Meschin's lands were divided amongst his daughters versus inherited in part or solely by Ranulf. You end up explaining that the brother died, but I would suggest moving that line to before Skipton went to Alice so it's clear up front (and I think it flows more naturally as a chain of thought through the paragraph.)
  • References: References used all seem reliable and adequately and consistently formatted.
    • Spot-checked statements attributed to refs 1, 5, 9, and 19, and didn't spot issues with verification or close paraphrasing.

--Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs talk 17:21, 6 February 2020 (UTC)Reply

Sorry for the delay - got home Tuesday from being out on the road with hubby and promptly got sick. Am feeling better today should be able to pick this back up tomorrow. Ealdgyth - Talk 18:21, 6 February 2020 (UTC)Reply
Okay, looks good, I am passing. Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs talk 14:50, 10 February 2020 (UTC)Reply