Talk:William Hoapili Kaʻauwai/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 02:52, 24 August 2018 (UTC)

Will start soon. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 02:52, 24 August 2018 (UTC)

Criteria

GA Criteria
GA Criteria: 1 1.a Y 1.b Y 2 2.a Y 2.b Y 2.c Y 2.d Y 3 3.a Y 3.b Y 4 4.a Y 5 5.a Y 6 6.a Y 6.b Y

• No DAB links Y
• No dead links Y
• No missing citations Y

Prose Suggestions

Please note that all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion.

• He became the only Native Hawaiian to be ordained a priest of the Anglican Church of Hawaii and traveled with its founder Queen Emma to Europe between 1865 and 1866, circumnavigating the globe upon his return eastward via New Zealand. suggest:

  He was the only Native Hawaiian to be ordained a priest of the Anglican Church of Hawaii, and traveled with its founder, Queen Emma, to Europe between 1865 and 1866, circumnavigating the globe upon his return eastward via New Zealand.

• hrough his mother, he descended from the ancient Hawaiian Mōʻī of Maui, Piʻilani. His mother was also a relative of Governor Hoapili. suggest:

  hrough his mother, he descended from the ancient Hawaiian Mōʻī of Maui, Piʻilani, and was also a relative of Governor Hoapili.

• Kaʻauwai was elected and served two nonconsecutive terms as a member of the House of Representatives, the lower house of the Hawaiian legislature, for the district of Wailuku on the island of Maui. He was elected in 1862 and re-elected to serve a second term in 1870. suggest:

  Kaʻauwai was elected and served two nonconsecutive terms as a member of the House of Representatives, the lower house of the Hawaiian legislature, for the district of Wailuku on the island of Maui, in 1862 and 1870.

• he was shunned by King Kamehameha V because of his treatment of Queen Emma and the unauthorized visit to New Zealand. hard to imagine a king "shunning" someone; suggest:

  he lost favor with King Kamehameha V because of his treatment of Queen Emma and the unauthorized visit to New Zealand.

• @KAVEBEAR: That is all my suggestions, passing now. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 14:07, 5 September 2018 (UTC)