Talk:William Harrington (knight)

Move request

The creator of this article requested that it be moved to include Sir at the start of the title. Per WP:TITLESINTITLES, this is not appropriate; the article should not be moved there. --Nat Gertler (talk) 23:26, 18 March 2016 (UTC)

CoA

Earl of Harrington COA

Are these the appropriate coats of arms? --NearEMPTiness (talk) 23:42, 18 March 2016 (UTC)

Or better these? --NearEMPTiness (talk) 23:44, 18 March 2016 (UTC)

Mini review

• "He served Henry V while the latter was Prince of Wales -- Noun for pronoun
• "He was elected a knight of the Garter two years later, and, acting again as standard-bearer at the siege of Rouen in 1419, he was badly wounded. -- Two things: Firstly, I'd pipe the link to Henry V using Prince of Wales, if that's what he was at that time, as using both titles for essentially the same person, makes for bumpy reading using. Secondly, I'm not sure of the conjunction here; the fact that he was badly wounded is not indicative of the fact he was a standard bearer for the second time, unless it was inevitable. I would split the sentence with either a full-stop or a semi-colon after "two years later", after merging it with the first sentence. For example: "He served the Prince of Wales, and in 1415 fought at the Battle of Agincourt as the king's standard-bearer. He was appointed a knight of the Garter two years later, and, resumed the post of standard-bearer at the siege of Rouen in 1419, during which he was badly wounded." or words to the effect of.
• "This was not, however the principal branch of the magnatial Neville family, and his new wife was not initially an heiress." -- Is "however" is missing a secondary comma?
• "However, through the death of her niece…" -- However/However repetition.
• "His marriage also gave him a connection to the duke of Exeter…" -- Pronoun confusion again and through to the end of this section. I'd mention him at the start and rely on the pronouns to work for their existence until the end.
• "He was sheriff of Yorkshire … -- New para, new noun. Also, Sheriff of Yorkshire should be in caps
• "In 1423, he…" Pronoun here would be fine if the previous point was fixed. I'd remove the AmEng comma too
• Per WP:OVERLINK, do we need to link to France?
• "Four years later, he…" -- AmEng comma

Feel free to adopt or disregard at your leisure. Cassianto^Talk 02:41, 30 August 2016 (UTC)