Talk:William E. Woods/GA1
Latest comment: 2 years ago by Kavyansh.Singh in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Kavyansh.Singh (talk · contribs) 13:19, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
Nominator: Ezlev (talk · contribs) at 21:47, 7 May 2022 (UTC)
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- Remove these duplicate links:
Beginning in 1972 and ending with his death in 2008, Woods advocated
— Honestly, it can just be "He advocated"he secured a job with the Hawaii Department of Health
— 'with' seems odd here. 'for'? 'in'?in his capacity as executive director; Woods critiqued
— should be a comma in place of the semi colon, I think/- In the lead's last para, we jump from 1990 to 2003, then back to 1990.
- Redlinks are important, but we have too many of them. Can we remove a few, especially from the lead?
- Okay, I've removed several redlinks from the article body. The lede is tricky – the four redlinks there are all relevant, notable, and would be linked from the lede if they were existing articles. WP:REDLINK seems to suggest that they should be included. What do you think? ezlev (user/tlk/ctrbs) 17:51, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
- If all of them are important, fine. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 18:50, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
- Okay, I've removed several redlinks from the article body. The lede is tricky – the four redlinks there are all relevant, notable, and would be linked from the lede if they were existing articles. WP:REDLINK seems to suggest that they should be included. What do you think? ezlev (user/tlk/ctrbs) 17:51, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
- In the infobox, we have
Honolulu, Hawai'i
andUniversity of Hawaii
[emphasis added]. Interchange them. in Arthur, Illinois before
— missing MOS:GEOCOMMAAfter graduating from the University of Hawaiʻi in 1971
— Already mentionning in the immediately previous section.for four
— "for the four"After the Supreme Court's decision in
— Specify 'United States' Supreme Courthad a circulation of 40,000 copies, 23,000 in Hawaii and 17,000 across the rest of the United States
— exact or approximate?If they were not successfully able to marry,
— Rephrase (avoid starting a sentence with 'If', 'Had', etc.)but the media's attention
— linking media appears to be WP:OverlinkingAs of January 1992, Woods was executive director of the GLEAF.
— Perhaps, "In Jan.."(equivalent to $4,377 in 2021)
— round off to 100s; same with other templatesWoods acquired nomination papers to run for Governor of Hawaii as a
— lowercase 'G' per MOS:JOBTITLE
Nice article!
- Thanks so much, Kavyansh.Singh! I've made the changes you suggested. ezlev (user/tlk/ctrbs) 17:40, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
Images edit
- Looks good! Suggesting to add ALT text.
References edit
- Why do we have pp. for newspapers pages? They don't seem to be ranges. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 15:26, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
Pretty solid article; promoting! If you have time and inclination, would appreciate if you can review any of these. Thanks! – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 18:58, 12 May 2022 (UTC)