Talk:Widerøe Flight 839/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: ---Dough4872 01:49, 13 November 2009 (UTC)
Comments:

1. Is there any more information that can be added to the lead?
2. "the plane filled fuel" sounds awkward.
3. "There was also on passenger in transit"? I think "on" should be "a".
4. "The co-pilot indicates that the flight was in difficulty. Eight seconds later, at 14:43:52, the CVR stops recording. ": it appears that this article is written in the past tense but this sentence is in the present. It should flow consistently with the rest of the article.
5. Combine the sentences "Additional restrictions were introduced following an incident on 18 January 1989. These were again modified on 1 November 1989."
6. "The Accident Investigation Board concluded: "The cause of the accident is that the plane during climb was subject to wind that succeeded the planes construction criteria. This caused a crack in the tail rudder/tailplane causing the plane to become uncontrollable.", this should use blockquote.
7. In sentence "Prior to this, Værøy and Røst had been served by helicopters using a heliport, that had replaced previous services with seaplanes", change comma after "heliport" to a semicolon.
8. "de Havilland Canada had also sent an alert to all operators of the Twin Otter to check the component, and had canceled the contract with the subcontractor.", "de" needs to be capitalized.
9. Is there a picture of the accident available?

I am placing the article on hold. ---Dough4872 01:49, 13 November 2009 (UTC)

Thank you for taking the time for the review. I have fixed all the comments above, except for the "de"-issue. The company is normally referred to with a small "de" at the beginning (just look at the article de Havilland Canada). As for an image, none of the sources I used had images (I use a text-only news search engine, and the report only contains a map). I have not been able to find any images online either, using several search sites. If I ever come across something, I will of course add it. Arsenikk ^(talk) 14:03, 13 November 2009 (UTC)

I will pass the article. ---Dough4872 16:11, 13 November 2009 (UTC)