Talk:Whitesnake/GA1

Latest comment: 2 years ago by Tayi Arajakate in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: Tayi Arajakate (talk · contribs) 23:50, 25 July 2021 (UTC)Reply

  • Hello SilverBullitt, I'll be take up the review for this nomination and present it to in some time. I hope you find my feedback to be helpful and that I get to learn something new in the process. Tayi Arajakate Talk 23:50, 25 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
    SilverBullitt, I have completed the review and it appears to be close to the good article criteria at present. I have listed some issues in the comments and assessment sections below, and will put it on hold till they are resolved. Tayi Arajakate Talk 10:26, 30 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • Hey Tayi Arajakate! I fixed the issues brought up in your review. During previous GA reviews on other articles, YouTube refs normally considered self-published have been accepted when they're interviews of the band's members themselves. I also didn't add too much on the band's musical style post-2003, since there really isn't much more to talk about. Potential sources all state the same: since reforming Whitesnake have continued their hard rock style while occasionally mixing in some of their blue elements. If there are any additional problems or you feel I didn't fix the ones already brought up in the review well enough, be sure to let me know!--SilverBullitt (talk) 11:42, 30 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
    SilverBullitt, they are interviews but there are potential copyright issues in linking to channels which aren't the original publishers of the interviews. Otherwise, I think you have more or less fixed the issues but I have one concern in that the article especially the section on style and influences may be using too many quotations/explanations from members of the band, particularly Coverdale and not elaborating much on secondary sources which have covered them. Tayi Arajakate Talk 12:45, 30 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
    Tayi Arajakate, I cut down the number of quotes in the section on style and influences. I feel that there are a significant number of secondary sources, namely music critics, which help give a broader sense of the band's style in contrast to what the band members themselves may feel. But again, this is just my opinion and I can do some additional work on the section if you feel it is necessary. I also fixed most of the YouTube refs, but there are still a few problematic ones, namely ref 182, 337, and 350. All of them are interviews and contain important information in relation to the article. Any suggestions on how to deal with those?--SilverBullitt (talk) 13:34, 30 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
    SilverBullitt, I would suggest dealing with them in the same way you have dealt with the others, removing the link and using the information from the video to cite them without a link. This seems possible with 337, the other two don't have much information other than the publisher and the year so I'd suggest just including the interviewer as the author for it to be identifiable. Regarding the style and influences section, though I would suggest elaborating more using the secondary sources but for the purpose of the good article criteria, it is broad enough in its coverage so I'm going to pass the article now. Good work on the article in general and congratulations on the successful nomination! Tayi Arajakate Talk 14:33, 30 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
    Tayi Arajakate, I fixed the remaining YouTube refs. Everything should be in order now! Thanks for the review and the pass!

Comments edit

  • "Through him, they were also able to recruit bassist Neil Murray ..." This line should specify Marsden, because it can sound confusing regarding whether it is Marsden or Moody.
  • Ref 23 uses the tabloid Metro (RSP entry) which should be replaced with a better citation, and if that isn't possible then the line along with citation should be removed.
  • "Whitesnake supported Dio for several show in the US, after which they toured Japan as a part of the Super Rock '84 festival." This line cites a source which is an announcement of the tour before its occurrence, which would need to be replaced.
  • Some of the youtube links are using non-official channels, i.e ref 84, 181, 336, etc.
  • Style and influences doesn't cover anything from the 2003–Present period.
  • "In response, Coverdale jokingly stated: "Hey, I never said I was Billy Shakespeare, mate!" This seems unnecessary and doesn't add anything, since the next line covers his overall response.

Assessment edit

  1. Comprehension: The comprehension is good.
  2.   Pass
    Criteria Notes Result
    (a) (prose) The prose is largely clear, concise and understandable.   Pass
    (b) (MoS) No manual of style issues found.   Pass
  3. Verifiability: The article is verifiable.
  4.   Pass
    Criteria Notes Result
    (a) (references) The article has a list of references and in-line citations for all material in the body.   Pass
    (b) (citations to reliable sources) Sources used are largely reliable.   Pass
    (c) (original research) No original research found.   Pass
    (d) (copyvio and plagiarism) No copyright issues found.   Pass
  5. Comprehensiveness: The article has a generally broad coverage.
  6.   Pass
    Criteria Notes Result
    (a) (major aspects) The article cover all its major aspects.   Pass
    (b) (focused) The article is focused without unnecessary deviations.   Pass
  7. Neutrality: The article is largely neutral.
  8.   Pass
    Notes Result
    The article is largely compliant with the policy on neutral point of view.   Pass
  9. Stability: The article is stable.
  10.   Pass
    Notes Result
    No ongoing edit warring or content disputes present.   Pass
  11. Illustration: The article is well illustrated.
  12.   Pass
    Criteria Notes Result
    (a) (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales) No copyright issues found.   Pass
    (b) (appropriate use with suitable captions) Use an captions are appropriate.   Pass