Talk:Warrior Women with Lupita Nyong'o

Latest comment: 1 year ago by Dux96 in topic Submission review & advice

Submission review & advice edit

@Erik, do you have time look at my first article attempt?

Dux96 (talk) 20:33, 17 September 2022 (UTC)Reply

@331dot would appreciate your thoughts, too Dux96 (talk) 20:35, 17 September 2022 (UTC)Reply
Dux96, looks like a good start, especially with substance! I would suggest the following:
  • Add an infobox
  • Expand the lead section to be more of a summary of the article body, per WP:LEAD
  • Write section headings in lowercase after the first word, e.g., "Critical response" and not "Critical Response"
  • Drop IMDb user ratings, and I don't think it's worth mentioning the lack of Rotten Tomatoes score either. Just dive straight into the reviews
  • For "In the media" section, I'm wary of quoting people involved with any film on their feelings about it. The emphasis should be on what independent sources thought of it.
  • The quote at the end of the "Summary" section is a bit lengthy and not "brief" as needed per MOS:QUOTE. I would summarize and paraphrase.
Hope that helps. Erik (talk | contrib) (ping me) 12:49, 18 September 2022 (UTC)Reply
@Erik good advice and thanks. Done, see revisions Dux96 (talk) 16:34, 18 September 2022 (UTC)Reply