Talk:WKBS-TV (Philadelphia)/GA2

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Nominator: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 04:51, 29 February 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: ZKang123 (talk · contribs) 13:16, 14 July 2024 (UTC)

Will pick this up.--ZKang123 (talk) 13:16, 14 July 2024 (UTC)

Images

The only image used here is a fair use logo of the channel to represent the article.

Copyedits

• Earwig don't show any close paraphrasing issues.

Lead

• within Philadelphia city limits, in South Philadelphia and the Roxborough tower farm, respectively. – might suggest the use of an en-dash between "city limits" and "South Philadeplhia", and remove comma before "respectively".
• and—at one point in its history—a 10 p.m. local newscast. – and briefly a 10 p.m. local newscast.
• it improved its fortunes – its fortunes improved
• led to the decision in 1982 to place all of the company's stations on the market. – this phrase is worded rather awkwardly. Maybe reword as resulted in the decision to put all company stations on the market in 1982?
• Similarly for leading the liquidating firm to decide that it was in its shareholders' best interests to shut the station down and sell it for parts. – prompted the liquidating firm to close the station and sell it for parts in the shareholders' best interests.
• In the years that followed – In the years following

More comments to come.--ZKang123 (talk) 12:21, 16 July 2024 (UTC)

Kaiser comes to Philadelphia

• I might change the header to something else in my view, since it also concerns the channel's early years.
• Explain the first earlier mention of FCC
• originating at – originating from
• later to have a lengthy career in TV news in Washington, D.C. – I think this could be better rephrased
• In April, a third of the station's 21-person news department was dismissed – might just say seven people, or seven out of twenty-one, were dismissed

Field ownership

• Kaiser Broadcasting sold a minority 22.5 percent stake in its holdings (excluding KBSC-TV in Los Angeles and Kaiser's radio stations) was sold to Field Communications on May 26, 1972, concurrent with Kaiser purchasing a majority 77.5 percent stake in Field's Chicago station, WFLD-TV. – this sentence is worded rather awkwardly especially with "...sold a minority... was sold...". I guess the "was sold" is a stray phrase typo.
• the competition in the independent station market in Philadelphia was starting to tilt toward channel 29 – something about this sentence (particularly the phrase "competition... tilt towards") is rather unencyclopedic.

Disposition

• No issues for the Closure section
• WPHL-TV, which had been running third among the independents as WTAF and WKBS fought for first and second – I felt the phrase "as WTAF and WKBS fought for first and second" a little unnecessary to rehash here
• had gained two new television stations – "new" is a bit unnecessary here.
• The battle to replace WKBS on channel 48 in Burlington, New Jersey, proved bitter. – sounds a bit like lifting from the source or original research.

That's all for copyedits issues.--ZKang123 (talk) 01:22, 17 July 2024 (UTC)

Sourcing and spot checks

• Ref 2 probably needs an access date. And also the exact page number since it links to a pdf. Would say for subsequent uses of Ref 2
  • I do not use access dates for history cards because they were printed products and will never change again. I have typically shunned using page mentions because the PDF pagination the FCC uses, while sensible, very poorly matches the physical documents that were scanned.
• Refs 6, 8, 19, 30, 43, 46, 50, 62 check out.
• Ref 16 notes Stu Nathan is sports director of Kaiser Broadcasting, not exactly the channel itself. Though a minor issue; I would say he's on the channel but more accurately sports director of the company than of the channel.
  • "of the Kaiser Broadcasting Corporation here". There is a second ref which I have added which calls him "WKBS sports director".
• Ref 40 notes that 82 staffers lost their jobs from the channel, but that 25% managed to find new jobs elsewhere. From the statement itself, it quite implies all 82 ended up unemployed.
• (optional) Add archive link for Ref 40.
• There's a space between [50] [51][52]

That's all for sourcing spot-checks. Putting nomination on hold until everything is addressed.--ZKang123 (talk) 01:56, 17 July 2024 (UTC)

• @ZKang123: Everything has been addressed. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 04:58, 17 July 2024 (UTC)
  • Satisfied with the changes. Passed.--ZKang123 (talk) 14:23, 17 July 2024 (UTC)

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