Talk:Vishtaspa

Latest comment: 4 years ago by HistoryofIran in topic Wrong place
Former good article nomineeVishtaspa was a Philosophy and religion good articles nominee, but did not meet the good article criteria at the time. There may be suggestions below for improving the article. Once these issues have been addressed, the article can be renominated. Editors may also seek a reassessment of the decision if they believe there was a mistake.
Article milestones
DateProcessResult
October 17, 2010Good article nomineeNot listed
Did You Know
A fact from this article appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "Did you know?" column on September 21, 2009.
The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that in Zoroastrian tradition (Faravahar pictured), Zoroaster was met with hostility when he arrived at the court of his future patron Vishtaspa?

GA Review edit

This review is transcluded from Talk:Vishtaspa/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Jezhotwells (talk) 12:48, 10 October 2010 (UTC)Reply

I shall be reviewing this article against the Good Article criteria, following its nomination for Good Article status.

Disambiguations: one found and fixed.[1] Jezhotwells (talk) 12:50, 10 October 2010 (UTC)Reply

Linkrot: none found. Jezhotwells (talk) 12:51, 10 October 2010 (UTC)Reply

Checking against GA criteria edit

GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
    So for example the surviving fragments of a fragmentary text that celebrates the deeds of Zairivairi, Vishtaspa's brother and captain of his forces against Arejat.aspa, chief of the Hyonas. Makes no sense.
    and fourth that his body should not leave his soul until the resurrection. Is that the real intent? Or is it that his "soul shall not leave his body"?
    The lead does not fully summarise the article as mandated by WP:LEAD.
    I find the prose throughout to be dense and hard to follow, with over-long sentences and it lacks the clarity and readability of a good encyclopaedic article. I think it needs a through copy-edit to improve clarity and style. Try reading it out aloud to see where improvements could be made.
    I made some minor copy-edits.[2]
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
    Article is well referenced, I assume good faith for all off-line sources.
    Journals and books should have ISBNs or ISSNs or doi links.
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
    No images used
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  
    This is near to the GA standard, but I think the text could do with improving to make it "reasonably good prose". The lead needs some expansion to cover all sections of the article. On Hold for seven days. Jezhotwells (talk) 13:26, 10 October 2010 (UTC)Reply
    There has been no response to this review, although the nominator has been notified so I am failing the nomination now. Jezhotwells (talk) 16:47, 17 October 2010 (UTC)Reply

Wrong place edit

Vishtaspa is mentioned in Avesta and there is no such title in the Shahnameh. The registration of Vishtaspa in Shahnameh box is not correct. The Goshtasp title is more accurate. Goodarz Irani (talk) 15:24, 16 March 2020 (UTC)Reply

No. Not everything is about the Shahnameh. Vishtaspa is an important figure in the Avesta/Zoroastrianism. The correct name is not Goshtasp at all. --HistoryofIran (talk) 15:34, 16 March 2020 (UTC)Reply