Talk:Victoria Park, Portsmouth

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Geni in topic Possible sources for the Arts Lodge

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I'm afraid that this article contains closely paraphrased content from its sources.

The article says:

When the old fortifications around Portsea and the Dockyard of Portsmouth were levelled, vast areas of open space became available for development of the city. Twelve and a half acres of land was then obtained by the Corporation from the War Office and designated for use as a "people's park". The original layout of the park was designed by Alexander McKenzie, but has since been redesigned in the past 130 years.

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When the old fortifications around Portsea and the Dockyard were levelled, 12 and a half acres of land was obtained by the Corporation from the War Office for a "peoples park".

Source 1 says:

The original layout of Victoria Park was designed by Alexander McKenzie, but has been modified over the last 130 or so years.

The article says:

The park is a clear example of late-19th century municipal landscaping with sections of vegetation screening the park from surrounding roads and buildings. A collection of monuments were moved to the park from various sites around the city including a miniature marble chinese temple of 1899-1902 commemorating HMS Orlando.

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The park is a fine example of late-19th century municipal landscaping with belts of vegetation screening the park from surrounding roads and buildings. A collection of monuments were moved to the park from various sites around the city, including a miniature marble Chinese temple of 1899-1902 commemorating the HMS Orlando.

The article says:

The centre of Victoria Park features a large enclosed area containing an aviary with peacocks, parrots, cockatiels and other exotic birds. An area next to this contains mammals such as rabbits and guinea pigs which are available to feed by members of the public.

Source 3 says:

At the centre of the park is an enclosed area containing an aviary with peacocks, parrots and other exotic birds. An adjacent area contains small mammals such as rabbits and guinea pigs which children enjoy feeding. Contained within the park but primarily towards the eastern entrance there is a large collection of memorials and monuments connected to the Royal Navy.

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Possible sources for the Arts Lodge

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http://www.thenews.coop/106984/news/community/community-arts-space-launches-petition-survival/ http://www.portsmouth.co.uk/news/politics/anger-as-city-council-kicks-out-tenants-from-portsmouth-arts-facility-1-7438805 http://www.bbc.co.uk/news/uk-england-hampshire-38894414 ©Geni (talk) 05:13, 8 February 2017 (UTC)Reply