Talk:Utopia, Northern Territory

Latest comment: 13 years ago by Parkwells in topic Tone

Copyedit edit

This article was one long section. I re-arranged the text somewhat to get it into sections, and left the wording as is but put in some fundamental links (eg: Indigenous Australian). I am not sure what the usual language in the area is but generally on Wikipedia there is no middle ground between "indigenous Australian" and the name of the local tribal/clan/family group (Alyawarra and Anmatjirra people from my reading of things but I am not sure if the language group and the name of the community group is the same thing here?)

Hope this helps the article move beyond the stubs of many of the other community / language groups / (name of group) people articles which are in place right now.Garrie 06:20, 4 January 2007 (UTC)Reply

Tone edit

I'm editing the section on issues because its tone is not encyclopedic; it sounds more like an extended essay: "Fascinating set of challenges" but has not citations. This is not supposed to have leading and subjective language, especially with no references.Parkwells (talk) 21:26, 27 November 2010 (UTC)Reply