Talk:Used to Love You/GA1

Latest comment: 8 years ago by Aoba47 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 04:33, 16 March 2016 (UTC)Reply

  • Grabbing this for a review.

Lead and infobox

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  • I would remove “upcoming” as her album will be released in a couple days anyway.   Done
  • I would put the names of the two singles in parenthesis after the phrase “its two singles” to be clear and concise.   Done
  • Replace “it” in the final sentence with the song title to read as follows (Interscope Records released “Used to Love You”…) Keep the link to the record company   Done
  • Replace “consisting in” with “consisting of”   Done
  • Restructure the second sentence of the second paragraph as it reads very awkwardly.   Done
  • Change the last sentence of the second paragraph to the following: (Stefani described the song as being inspired by the end of her marriage with Gavin Rossdale) to be more concise. Keep the link to Gavin Rossdale.   Done
  • Change the first sentence to as follows: (“Used to Love You” was critically acclaimed for its lyrics and Stefani’s emotional delivery, with most critics calling it a heartbreaking song. Critics viewed the single as improvement over the 2014 releases, which Stefani later described as “rushed”.)   Done
  • In the sentence about the music video release, replace “while” with “and” to read (during a concert on October 17, 2015 and its music video…)   Done
  • Replace “It” with “The music video”   Done
  • Clarify the meaning of emoting. What kind of emotions? Be more specific. Also this sentence reads very awkwardly so I would suggest rewording this sentence.   Done

Background and release

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  • Restructure the first sentence as you are attempting to convey a lot of information. It would be better to break this up into multiple separate sentences.   Done
  • Replace “to start over” with “of starting over”   Done
  • Remove “therefore”   Done
  • Restructure the final sentence of the first paragraph as it reads very awkwardly. Great quote, but the sentence needs work and can be separated into two more concise sentences as a possible way of improvement.   Done
  • Restructure the first two sentence to the following: (A&R President Aaron Bay-Schuck at Interscope Records asked songwriters and producers J.R. Rotem, Justin Tranter, and Julia Michaels to work with Stefani on the album. Stefani recalled saying the following to them during a recording session:) Use the quote after the colon.   Done
  • As a general comment to the entire article, make sure the punctuation is outside the quotation marks unless you are citing a full sentence.   Done
  • Remove “on the other hand” as this sentence is not being contrasted with anything.   Done
  • Restructure the last sentence of the second paragraph. Separating it into separate sentences may improve it as you are attempting to communicate a lot of ideas here.   Done
  • Just say (Before performing “Used to Love You”)   Done
  • Remove comma after cover art   Done

Composition

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  • I would put the image as “upright”   Done
  • An audio sample of the single would probably be better than the image for this section, but the image is appropriate (This is just a suggestion).   Done
  • Change the second half of the first sentence to “Rotem is also one of the song’s producers.”   Done
  • Do you really need all the sources in the second sentence? It is a little odd and looks weird on the page, especially with the phrase “synthpop ballad” being separated by multiple sources.   Done
  • You do not need all those sources with the sentence on the song being inspired by the divorce. Two or three would be okay. There is such a thing as over-referencing (using 5 or more references) and I do not think using all those sources adds anything to the sentence.   Done

Critical reception

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  • Change the beginning of the second sentence to (Madison Vain of Entertainment Weekly felt the song’s “hyper-personal lyrics” were “immediate and affecting”,…)   Done
  • The first quote from McDermott needs a closing quotation   Done
  • Acknowledging is a strange word choice, change it to something else (like praising, etc.)   Done

Commercial performance

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  • Replace "received moderate success" to "was a moderate success"   Done
  • Delete the phrase “for the week ending November 7, 2015”  Done
  • Delete “ which serves as an extension to the Billboard Hot 100”
I think it's important to note that before charting within the top 100, it debuted here.
I will allow it. I didn't want you to remove the entire sentence, but I think defining what the chart is was a little unnecessary, but it is alright as it currently stands. Aoba47 (talk) 22:36, 17 March 2016 (UTC)Reply
  • Change the second sentence to (The track peaked at number 52 on the Billboard Hot 100 on December 19, 2015). The information about it first entering the charts is not necessary.
I also think it's important to note that the track reentered the charts before peaking.
I am not entirely convinced that it is necessary, but I will allow it if you think that is important enough for inclusion. Aoba47 (talk) 22:36, 17 March 2016 (UTC)Reply
  • Clarify the meaning of “elsewhere” or delete it as it is an empty word.   Done
  • Remove comma after 57   Done

Music video

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  • Could you possibly put an image from the music video here?
There was a picture posted, but IndianBio nominated it for deletion for not having enough encyclopedic value, and was subsequently deleted
I think that is somewhat silly as I have seen plenty of articles on songs use a screenshot from a music video (I think taking down images for not having "enough encyclopedic value" is kind of dumb), but for the purposes of this remove that is okay. Aoba47 (talk) 22:36, 17 March 2016 (UTC)Reply
  • Clarify the meaning of “dealing with emotions”. I would remove it as I feel “on the verge of tears” covers it.   Done
  • Replace “did not intend for it” with “was not intended”   Done
  • Clarify meaning of “Ryan Seacrest website”. Just say the website.   Done

Live performances

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  • The phrase “where she also performed hits from her career” reads very awkwardly. I would combine for the first two sentences as follows: (On October 17, 2015, Stefani first performed “Used to Love You” live during a concert for Mastercard users at the Hammerstein Ballroom in New York City.) Keep the links.   Done
  • Reword the phrase “the television performance debut” as it reads slightly awkward to me.   Done
  • Considered is incorrectly spelled in the third sentence.   Done
  • Clarify the reviews as talking about Stefani’s performance on Ellen as it is somewhat unclear.   Done
  • Change the last sentences to the following: Stefani performed the song during various public appearances including, The Voice, The Tonight Show Starring Jimmy Fallon, and New Years Eve with Carson Daily. Use the references where appropriate and keep the links. There is no reason to break everything apart with specific dates here.   Done

Credits and personnel

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  • This is more of a note, but when the album does come out, add a “Credits and personnel” section with the album’s linear notes as the source.
Will do! Carbrera (talk) 22:20, 17 March 2016 (UTC)Reply

References

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  • Link 31 is dead (archive to fix)   Done
  • Link 41 is broken and does not lead to the article (archive to fix)   Done
  • Link 35 is broken and does not lead to the article (archive to fix)   Done
  • While not required for the GAN, I would recommend archiving all the links to avoid problems like those addressed in the above comments in the future
Thanks!

Final comments

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GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):   d (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail: