Talk:United Nations Foundation

First person

Please avoid any use of the first-person article. This page seems to have been either copied and pasted from the organization's website, or written by a press officer. Any uses of "our", "we", and other worlds like that need to go (I think I got most or all of them). Also, this page needs to be put into fewer buzz-words.--ZachPruckowski 15:35, 10 April 2006 (UTC)

Revamping the article

Hello. I am going to attempt to clean up the article a bit. Does anyone have any suggestions for citations on this? Thanks in advance. Orangefan32 (talk) 17:32, 23 April 2011 (UTC)

Here are some sources that look like they'll be useful. Some might need to be gotten through the library.

• http://www.springerlink.com/content/n5r4gk314044026r/
• http://www.emeraldinsight.com/journals.htm?articleid=1669065&show=abstract
• http://heinonline.org/HOL/LandingPage?collection=journals&handle=hein.journals/gjicl27&div=19&id=&page=
• http://www.questia.com/googleScholar.qst?docId=5008295419
• http://www.allacademic.com/meta/p_mla_apa_research_citation/5/0/0/7/4/p500748_index.html

I'll take a closer look at the article tomorrow.--Sage Ross - Online Facilitator, Wikimedia Foundation (talk) 01:42, 27 April 2011 (UTC)

More suggestions:

• The title in the first line should be bold. None of the bolded items in the 'history and background' section should be bolded, but they should be wikilinks.
• The section titles should only have the first letter of the first word capitalized (unless it's a proper noun title like "Nothing But Nets")
• The article doesn't make clear the relationship between the UNF, the Better World Foundation, and the Better World Campaign.
• Overall, the article reads like it's written completely from the foundation's own literature (which isn't surprising, since that seems to be the case). There appears to be quite a lot of academic literature about the UNF (see above for a sampling, but it looks like there's more if you dig deeper). There should probably be something about venture philanthropy, some discussion of how the UNF fits into the broader history of the UN, some discussion of the effectiveness of the UNF, and some relevant background on Ted Turner explaining he chose the UNF as the focus of his philanthropy. In general, it simply needs a lot more content based on journal articles and independent news reports.
• In the first history paragraph, it says "$446 billion has been given by the Foundation to UN projects." Is that supposed to be milliion instead of billion? What's the source for that?

--Sage Ross - Online Facilitator, Wikimedia Foundation (talk) 15:08, 27 April 2011 (UTC)

One more thing... it seems useful here, in some cases to link both outside reporting and the UNF's own pages about specific projects, rather than simply replacing UNF citations with others. It's okay to have multiple footnotes in a row, when it's useful for readers.--Sage Ross - Online Facilitator, Wikimedia Foundation (talk) 15:14, 27 April 2011 (UTC)

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