Talk:USS Tarawa (CV-40)

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Llammakey in topic GA Review

Reversion of Edit 5/30.09

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I reverted a large revision, which was addition of the following text:

The Terrible "T" Made a shake down cruise in 1951 to Gitmo.In the fall of 1951 about October she departed Quanset Point Ri. for a 6 month tour in the Med. In the fall of 1952 she was sent back to the Mediterranean for a second tour with the "Sixth Fleet". The normal six months tour was extended while her relief the "Hornet or the Wasp" was being repaired after hitting a commercial ship in New York harbor. ON Nov.12,1953 the Tarawa was again sent to the Mediterranean where she compeated with the USS Midway in flight deck operations. The "Tarawa" Received the navy "E" for it's operations. The "T" was selected to make a World Cruise.She was subsequentially reassigned to the 77 Taskforce out of Japan. She spent forty days up along the Korean coast.In Sasebo Japan she was picked to represent the United States at the first Battle of Midway celebration; along with the USS O'Bannon DD who was in the battle, and Admiral William "Bull" Halsey, also in the battle. After visiting Sidney Au. and the celebration,she continued to Melbourne Au. and Wellington N.Z. Leaving N.Z. for Pearl Harbor, one day out,She was diverted to Manila P.I. at flank speed. Arriving Subic Bay P.I.she was ordered into the sea between China and Formosa. The Chinees were massing for an invasion of Formosa. After several days in the fog we made Hong Kong then Pearl and San. Fran. through the Canal, "HOME" to Quonset Pt R.I.m September 11,1954

There are at least two errors in it, which makes me worry about the rest: 1) O'Bannon was commissioned late June 1942, so could not have been at Midway; 2) Wasp did not collide with a commercial ship: here is the text from the Wasp wiki article:

On 26 April 1952, Wasp collided with destroyer minesweeper Hobson while conducting night flying operations en route to Gibraltar. Hobson lost 176 of the crew, including her skipper. Rapid rescue operations saved 52 men. Wasp sustained no personnel casualties, but her bow was torn by a 75-foot saw-tooth rip. The carrier proceeded to Bayonne, New Jersey, for repairs and, after she entered drydock there, the bow of aircraft carrier Hornet (CV-12)—then undergoing conversion—was removed and floated by barge from Brooklyn, New York, and fitted into position on Wasp, replacing the badly shattered forward end of the ship. This remarkable task was completed in only 10 days, enabling the carrier to get underway to cross the Atlantic. On 2 June 1952, Wasp relieved Tarawa at Gibraltar and joined Carrier Division (CarDiv) 6 in the Mediterranean Sea. After conducting strenuous flight operations between goodwill visits to many Mediterranean ports, Wasp was relieved at Gibraltar on 5 September by Leyte.

While I respect the author of the edit, who must have been a crew member at the time, the material clearly needs to be fact-checked and edited for grammar. I recommend he check the history of the ship at DANFS.--Busaccsb (talk) 21:40, 30 May 2009 (UTC)Reply

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Reviewer: Llammakey (talk · contribs) 19:41, 27 June 2017 (UTC)Reply


GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

  1. Is it reasonably well written?
    A. Prose quality:  
    over-use of the word she when referring to Tarawa; some variation like vessel, carrier, warship, etc.
    B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:  
  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. References to sources:  
    B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:  
    C. No original research:  
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects:  
    Article does not cover air groups assigned to carrier and nowhere does it mention how many aircraft and types of aircraft were flown from the carrier
    B. Focused:  
  4. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. Is it stable?
    No edit wars, etc:  
  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:  
    B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:  
  7. Overall: The history of the ship is only partially here. As an aircraft carrier, one expects to see information about the aircraft that flew from the ship and which units the ship embarked. Too much of the vessel's history is missing, let alone key info like flight deck size. Suggest adding the required info and re-applying for GA. Other nitpicks are abbreviations are not consistent within article and words the need to be linked, such as knots, are not.
    Pass or Fail: