Talk:USS O'Flaherty

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Zawed in topic GA Review
Good articleUSS O'Flaherty has been listed as one of the Warfare good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Article milestones
DateProcessResult
November 26, 2019Good article nomineeListed
January 27, 2020WikiProject A-class reviewApproved
Current status: Good article

GA Review edit

This review is transcluded from Talk:USS O'Flaherty/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 20:30, 8 November 2019 (UTC)Reply

I will take this one, comments to follow in due course. Zawed (talk) 20:30, 8 November 2019 (UTC)Reply

Apologies for the delay in getting to this. I have reviewed up until the Guam section, with no issues spotted apart from a possible typo which I have fixed. I have to take a break now (my four-week old son is screaming his head off), more to follow. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 06:04, 16 November 2019 (UTC)Reply

  • Hunter-killer operations and Lingayen Gulf: perhaps link kamikaze
  • Linked already
  • Iwo Jima: perhaps link the battle here: the invasion of Iwo Jima began on 19 February
  • According to the Battle of Iwo Jima article, both the battle and invasion began that day, it is a semantic distinction here.
  • Okinawa: suggest rephrasing "O'Flaherty contributed with her aft 40 mm guns to flak that helped shoot down of a diving Japanese A6M Zero."
  • Fixed
  • Okinawa: "...shafts had a missing fairwater...", what is a fairwater? There are no obvious links on Wikipedia so may need to rephrase. Perhaps just refer to her shafts and steering needing repairs.
  • Made less specific
  • Okinawa: suggest "She was drydocked on ARD-26 between 4 and 8 June for the necessary repairs,..."
  • Done
  • Okinawa: "...joined up with Task Unit 32.1.3 on the same day." Please check the Task Unit designation, previously stated she was joining 32.1.1.
  • Order was changed en route, but I've made it less specific because I think there was too much detail there
  • References: the Friedman 1981 reference is missing the state, plus the Gardiner ref shows the state as initials, not written out in full like the others.
  • Dupe links: Guam, Majuro, Wake Island
  • Fixed
  • Image tags look OK

Finally got back to this to finish off the review comments, sorry for the delay. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 21:08, 22 November 2019 (UTC)Reply

Your changes look good, passing as GA now as I am satisfied that it meets the necessary criteria. Zawed (talk) 07:56, 26 November 2019 (UTC)Reply