Talk:Typhoon Sarika/GA1

Latest comment: 4 years ago by KN2731 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 15:51, 15 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

Will do by tonight hopefully. YE Pacific Hurricane 15:51, 15 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

@Yellow Evan: in case you forgot about this ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 06:19, 27 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • "It was the twenty-first named storm and the tenth typhoon of the annual Pacific typhoon season. Sarika developed from a tropical disturbance east of the Philippines on October 13. " Can these two sentences be combined? YE Pacific Hurricane 03:57, 28 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Can typhoon be linked in the lead? YE Pacific Hurricane 03:57, 28 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Right off the bat, the lead should probably be longer. I usually try to include at least some of the following information (and tbf some of that is in here). Listed in order of general importance:
    • Deaths/injuries
    • Monetary damage estimates divided up by category
    • Number of homes damaged/destroyed, leaving number of people homeless
    • Number of crops destroyed (usually in ha)
    • Explaining how people died/got injured, especially if most of the deaths of a cyclone can be traced back to one or two incidents
    • Areas that were according to sources the worst hit with a possible brief explanation of why
    • Disaster declarations
  • "Sarika was first noted by the United States-based Joint Typhoon Warning Center (JTWC) as a disorganized tropical disturbance on October 11, while it was about 1,050 km (650 mi) southeast of Manila in the Philippines.[1]" just axe everything after Manila. YE Pacific Hurricane 03:57, 28 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

It's well researched, I'll give you that much. Still, the article is a bit overly detailed and wordy, as well as a bunch of minor but persistent problems. YE Pacific Hurricane 03:57, 28 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

@Yellow Evan: should have gotten everything. Let me know if the lead needs more expansion. ~ KN2731 {talk · contribs} 08:36, 1 May 2020 (UTC)Reply