Talk:Typhoon Rusa/GA1

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 04:11, 3 August 2012 (UTC)

• "It developed on August 22 from the monsoon trough in the northwestern Pacific Ocean, well to the southeast of Japan" don't wikilnk Pacific Ocean. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:11, 3 August 2012 (UTC)
  • Why not? That's the first mention. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 13:39, 3 August 2012 (UTC)
    • It's a major geographic term. 13:46, 3 August 2012 (UTC)
      • Fine. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 13:51, 3 August 2012 (UTC)
• " On August 26, the storm moved across the Amami Islands of Japan, where Rusa left 20,000 people without power and killed two." no need for "of Japan" when it is explained in the wikilink. Also, "killed two" seems kinda weird here I'd suggest "two fatalities". YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:11, 3 August 2012 (UTC)
  • Not everyone will read the wikilink, and I figured they were rare enough that saying it was near Japan would establish context. I did change the fatalities bit though. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 13:39, 3 August 2012 (UTC)
• "The typhoon also dropped heavy rainfall in neighboring North Korea, leaving 26,000 people homeless and killing three. Rusa also destroyed large areas of crops in the country already affected by ongoing famine conditions. The typhoon later became extratropical over eastern Russia on September 1, dissipating three days later." you said "The typhoon" in back to back sentences. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:11, 3 August 2012 (UTC)
  • No I didn't. ...? --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 13:39, 3 August 2012 (UTC)
• Shouldn't impact be re-titled Preparations and impact? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:11, 3 August 2012 (UTC)
  • Yea, originally there weren't preps. Good call. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 13:39, 3 August 2012 (UTC)
• "where about 36,000 homes and 622 military buildings were flooded. At the airbase in Gangneung, floods submerged 16 jet fighters.[2]" run on sentence. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:11, 3 August 2012 (UTC)
  • Which one? --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 13:39, 3 August 2012 (UTC)
    • The first, idk why I copied the second one down :( YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 13:46, 3 August 2012 (UTC)
• "The name Rusa was retired after its usage in 2002, and was replaced with Nuri in 2004.[38]" this is kinda weird as its own paragraph. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:11, 3 August 2012 (UTC)
  • It didn't fit anywhere else though, and it's consistent with other articles. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 13:39, 3 August 2012 (UTC)

Otherwise, its good for now. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:11, 3 August 2012 (UTC)

Everything good now? --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 16:36, 3 August 2012 (UTC)

Yea, passing. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 23:57, 3 August 2012 (UTC)