Talk:Typhoon Kinna/GA1
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Reviewer: Hurricane Noah (talk · contribs) 01:10, 22 December 2018 (UTC)
Discussion
editLead
edit- Probably should have a link to the season article in the lead as well as in the MH.
- Probably shouldn't say "Kinna strengthened into a tropical storm at 00:00 UTC on September 11." since it was not named prior to becoming a TS.
- "The
typhoonturned north in response to a trough and passed through Okinawa as a minimal typhoon." Typhoon should be replaced by 'system'.
- Cyclone works better here so that's what I went with.
- "Typhoon Kinna obtained peak intensity on September 13, but thereafter, Kinna accelerated north-northeastward toward Kyushu
and maintained its intensity." would be better to have "[...], maintaining its intensity."
- The first Kyushu should be linked and the second de-linked.
- "There were 213 landslides and 9 bridges were washed out while 47 roads were damaged." could be rewritten as 'There were 213 landslides, 9 bridges washed out, and 47 roads were damaged.' the current iteration just doesn't seem right to me.
- Probably should have a link to hectares and acres as some may not be familiar with it.
- US dollar amount should be "$383 million (1991 USD)".
That should be it for the lead. NoahTalk 02:45, 22 December 2018 (UTC)
Meteorological history
edit- Link to maximum sustained winds?
- Link to mbar and inHg?
- Link first mention of Kyushu and de-link the second.
- Same thing here as in the lead... "[...], maintaining its intensity."
That should be it for the MH portion. NoahTalk 02:59, 22 December 2018 (UTC)
Impact
edit- "
The typhoondropped heavy rainfall across much of the southern Japanese archipelago,[...]" Should be replaced with Typhoon Kinna as it is the first sentence.
- "A peak rainfall total occurred of 338 mm (13.3 in) at Nanbu, including 330 mm (13 in) in a 24-hour time frame." Should be corrected to "A peak rainfall total of 338 mm (13.3 in) occurred at Nanbu, including 330 mm (13 in) in a 24-hour time frame.
- "When the storm passed through southern Okinawa, a minimum surface pressure of 958 mbar (28.3 inHg) recorded at Kadena Air Base, [...]" Add 'was' before the word recorded.
- Maebaru is misspelled (the non-linked one in P1)
- "On Shikoku Island, roads were cut in 16 places in Tokushima Prefecture." would be better to simply say the roads were damaged.