Talk:Typhoon Irving (1982)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk · contribs) 19:52, 12 May 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

1. a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall: Pass

   Pass/Fail:

Review

Lead

• Can tropical depression be Wikilinked?
  • Sure - I'll link it at the first mention of the TC page. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 21:18, 15 May 2020 (UTC)

Meteorological history

• in early Septembe 1982. Should say September
  • Fixed. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 21:18, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
• By early on September 4, wording
  • Don't see the problem here. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 21:18, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
    • Could By be removed? I think that's what tripping me up. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 00:26, 16 May 2020 (UTC)
      • Probably not but I re-worded the sentence slightly. Better? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 01:12, 16 May 2020 (UTC)
        • Y HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 01:14, 16 May 2020 (UTC)
• However (see WP:EDITORIALIZING)
  • Looking at the context, I don't see how this contrast is editorializing. "in part because the subtropical ridge was anticipated to remain anchored north of the system. However, this ridge proved to be weaker than expected and Irving tracked slowly northwestward instead." The source say the storm move in a certain direction but it moved in a different direction instead. That's an indisputable contrast. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane}
    • Y. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 00:26, 16 May 2020 (UTC)
• A Hurricane hunter aircraft. Please maintain consistency with capitalization. It was earlier spelt as after a Hurricane Hunter aircraft with a capital H.
  • Fixed. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 21:18, 15 May 2020 (UTC)

Impact

• Schools were closed can this be merged with the previous sentence?
  • Sure. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 21:18, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
• Twenty-three were wounded. Please spell as 23 and try to merge with following sentence
  • Doesn't really fit in with any other sentence and I don't want to start a sentence with a number. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 21:18, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
    • I re-read the MOS and it says generally, but you do not have to so we can leave that.HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 00:26, 16 May 2020 (UTC)
• However (see WP:EDITORIALIZING)
  • This I can sorta see; changed. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 21:18, 15 May 2020 (UTC)

References

• Please add "via Lexis Nexis (subscription required)" to reference #11 if this is how you accessed it.
  •  Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 21:18, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
    • Yellow Evan Passing. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 01:14, 16 May 2020 (UTC)