Talk:Typhoon Helen (1972)

Todo

More anything. Hurricanehink 15:07, 11 April 2006 (UTC)

Reduced to stub because not much anything has been added, and our standards have changed since April. --Coredesat 01:59, 8 December 2006 (UTC)

GA Review

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Reviewer: TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contribs) 16:42, 2 January 2012 (UTC)

I'll be reviewing this here and in IRC soon. – TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 16:42, 2 January 2012 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, andhere for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice,fiction, and lists):

   See below for comments.

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

1. Later that day a weakened Helen emerged into the Sea of Japan. — A comma is needed after "day".

   Done Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:17, 2 January 2012 (UTC)

Meteorological history

1. At this time, the Joint Typhoon Warning Center (JTWC) began monitoring the newly christened Tropical Storm Helen. — "Christened" isn't typically a word we associate with "named". It is more of a religion word.

   Done Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:17, 2 January 2012 (UTC)

2. Additionally, the Philippine Atmospheric, Geophysical and Astronomical Services Administration being warning on the system, assigning it the local name Paring. — This doesn't seem right..

   Being -> began Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:17, 2 January 2012 (UTC)

3. The following day, Helen attained typhoon status as it acquired a more northerly track. — Can you "acquire" a more northerly track?

   Changed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:17, 2 January 2012 (UTC)

4. In Shinomisaki, just west of where the center of Helen passed, a barometric pressure of 956.9 mbar (hPa; 28.26 inHg) — I think you are forgetting two words at the end (was recorded)?

   Fixed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:17, 2 January 2012 (UTC)

5. The remnants of Helen then track across southern Hokkaido before dissipating just east of the island on September 21. — track → tracked.

   Fixed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:17, 2 January 2012 (UTC)

Impact

1. Peak rainfall in Honshu and Hokkaido reached 580 mm (23 in) and 790 mm (31 in) respectively — Typically when I see this sort of sentence, there is a comma before respectively.

   Fixed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:17, 2 January 2012 (UTC)

2. According to Police in Tokyo, 140 bridges sustained damage — Police does not need to be capitalized I believe.

   Fixed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:17, 2 January 2012 (UTC)

Summary

Overall, good read. I understand it, which is a good thing considering I know very little about WPAC typhoons and tracking them. Fix these minor issues and I'll pass the article. – TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 17:00, 2 January 2012 (UTC)

Thanks for the review TAWX! I believe I got everything. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:17, 2 January 2012 (UTC)

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