Talk:Typhoon Betty (1987)/GA1

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 13:20, 22 July 2014 (UTC)

Hello User:Yellow Evan! Secret abandoned this review, so Juliancolton had to delete the page. Anyway, I am here today to review this article. Below are the issues that I need to be fixed/addressed before I can list this article as a Good Article.--12george1 (talk) 13:20, 22 July 2014 (UTC)

Hi 12george1 ! :P Sorry for the late reply; I got very wikilazy. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:52, 27 July 2014 (UTC)

• "was a powerful and destructive tropical cyclone that" - Wikilink tropical cyclone
  • Linked. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:52, 27 July 2014 (UTC)
• "in August 1987. The seventh typhoon and second super typhoon of the active 1987 Pacific typhoon season," - Because of the title, the infobox, and "August 1987", it's pretty obvious that this cyclone was in the 1987 Pacific typhoon season. Why not just say "of the active typhoon season" or something like that?
  •  Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:52, 27 July 2014 (UTC)
• "The next day, Typhoon Betty made landfall in the central Philippines on the August 12." - Here's another Captain Obvious statement :P You started this sentence with "The next day" and ended with "August 12". Also "on the August 12" is a grammatical error.
  • Removed. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:52, 27 July 2014 (UTC)
• Why not mention in the first paragraph of the lede that Betty was one of the most intense tropical cyclones on record?
  • Since when? 890 mbar is low, but not that low. This is the WPAC we are talking about. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:52, 27 July 2014 (UTC)
    • Now that I look at it, never mind. The MH mentions that Betty was "one of the most powerful storms ever recorded." But since no record was broken, I guess it isn't that important.--12george1 (talk) 20:50, 27 July 2014 (UTC)
• "Across the Philippines, Typhoon Betty brought widespread flooding to the Philippines," - Remove "to the Philippines", but keep the comma.
  • Removed. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:52, 27 July 2014 (UTC)
• "Along the Maguindanao and Albay provinces alone" ---> "In Maguindanao and Albay provinces alone"
  •  Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:52, 27 July 2014 (UTC)
• "the JMA estimated that Betty attained its peak intensity of 190 km/h (120 mph) and a minimum barometric pressure of 890 mbar (26 inHg)." ---> "the JMA estimated that Betty attained its peak intensity with maximum sustained winds of 190 km/h (120 mph) and a minimum barometric pressure of 890 mbar (26 inHg)."
  •  Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:52, 27 July 2014 (UTC)
• "Afte entering the Gulf of Tonkin, Betty made" - Typo
  • Fixed. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:52, 27 July 2014 (UTC)
• "Eight-five people perished as a result of Typhoon Betty[1] while 17 were reported missing.[16] Two other people were killed in San Pablo; four died in the city of Batangas.[17]" - This is really confusing me. I think you should just remove "other" between "Two" and "people", because that could imply there were actually 87 fatalities in the Philippines.
  • Removed. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:52, 27 July 2014 (UTC)
• " flights in and out of the country on August 12 were cancelled.[11]" ---> " flights in and out of the country on August 12 were canceled.[11]"
  •  Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 04:52, 27 July 2014 (UTC)
• Ok, so now I am going to pass this article and list it as a Good Article. Congratulations,--12george1 (talk) 20:50, 27 July 2014 (UTC)