Talk:Tropical Storm Olga (2019)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Usernameunique (talk · contribs) 02:56, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

Lead

• The transition from the first to second sentence is rather abrupt. Something like "The storm began as..." would be helpful.
• The first paragraph could probably be chopped down; after all, it's a paragraph that (mostly) summarizes a two-paragraph section, which isn't much of a summary.
• Total damage along the path of the cyclone was estimated at $400 million. Is this anywhere in the body of the article?

Meteorological history

• a general northeast course. — Should this be "northeastern course"?
• However, since the boundary had not yet moved through Olga's circulation, it persisted as a tropical cyclone. — Is "it" supposed to refer to Olga, or to the boundary? Grammatically, it refers to the boundary.
• over the southeastern Ontario province — Might want to rephrase. From an American context, saying "over the southeastern Michigan state" would seem pretty odd.

Preparations and impact

• Flash flood watches encompassed nearly 8 million residents — Not sure "encompassed" is the right word? "were issued to nearly 8 million residents"? "Nearly 8 million residents were in areas with flash flood watches"?

Louisiana

• The energy companies Entergy and Cleco reported damage to 150 and 35 power poles, respectively. An additional 260 power poles were impaired in New Orleans and Hammond. — So did Entergy and Cleco not operate in Hammond, or are the 150/35 numbers restricted to certain locations?
• The Jazz Half marathon was also delayed. — For how long?
• High winds temporarily damaged the perimeter fencing — Does "temporarily" mean that it was repaired? If so, I don't think you need that word.

Mississippi

• Prentiss, Corinth — Not sure why these are linked later rather than here.

• "Corinth" is now a red link in the phrase "were recorded across Prentiss, Corinth, and Alcorn counties." It looks like that's because it's not a county at all, but rather a city in Alcorn county. --Usernameunique (talk) 20:46, 13 April 2020 (UTC)

• Good catch. Fixed Usernameunique. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contributions) 16:42, 14 April 2020 (UTC)

• worked to restore power to the WTVA and WLOV-TV transmitters. — Were those stations taken off the air by the storm?

Tennessee'

• F3 tornado — Anything this can be linked to?

Elsewhere

• Never knew a "flash drought" was a thing. Anything to link to?

Aftermath

• Any other images that could be used here?
• waster systems — waste systems? Water systems?
• on the right-of-way — Does this mean the right side of the road?
• The city of Okolona planned to ask that agency for funds as well. — Did it end up doing so?
• penned U.S. President Donald Trump for — I think you mean "penned a request to U.S. President Donald Trump".
• the Red Cross set up shelter to distribute — "set up a shelter"?

References

• Do you happen to know which tool automatically adds archived URLs to each reference? I know there is one, but can't remember its name. That might be useful here, where some of the URLs are likely to go dead with time.

Overall

• Nice work, TropicalAnalystwx13. Minor comments above. --Usernameunique (talk) 02:56, 7 April 2020 (UTC)
  • Hey, Usernameunique, I've gone through many of these comments and I'll fix the remainder tonight. Just so I know we're on the same page, when you're referring to archiving the links that may go dead in the future, are you referring to the event report links from the National Centers for Environmental Information? TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contributions) 19:10, 12 April 2020 (UTC)
    • TropicalAnalystwx13, I was thinking of the InternetArchiveBot, and just ran it. More so than the event report links, I had in mind news articles such as this, which might be dead links in another 10 years. --Usernameunique (talk) 23:14, 12 April 2020 (UTC)
      • Usernameunique: Ah okay, thank you for doing that. I believe I have addressed the remainder of your concerns. One exception is whether the city of Okolona later requested funds from FEMA--I cannot find any additional information on that. Thank you for your throughout edits and review! TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contributions) 06:06, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
        • Looks good, TropicalAnalystwx13. Just one minor fix needed and then we're good to go. --Usernameunique (talk) 20:53, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
          • Great, passing now. --Usernameunique (talk) 17:05, 14 April 2020 (UTC)