Talk:Tropical Storm Linda (1997)/GA1

Latest comment: 13 years ago by Starstriker7 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Starstriker7(Talk) 20:58, 2 July 2011 (UTC)Reply

I'll take on this review. --Starstriker7(Talk) 20:58, 2 July 2011 (UTC)Reply

Criterion 1 (clear/concise prose, spelling/grammar correct [a]; complies with MOS guides on lead, layout, W2W, fiction, and list incorporation)

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Lead

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  • "was the worst typhoon in Vietnam in at least 100 years" -> was a Pacific typhoon and the worst storm to hit Vietnam in at least 100 years?
  • "Several countries around the world sent relief aid, including medical teams, food, and clothing, and ultimately the food supply and health status of the storm victims were not as bad as originally feared." - This sentence seems awkward to me. Do you mean they helped until the problem was alleviated, or that they came and found that the problem wasn't as bad as expected?
  • "killing at least 164 deaths." --> causing at least 164 deaths.

Meteorological history

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Impact and aftermath

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Criterion 2 (all info cited, inline refs and ref section used [a]; reliable sources cite challengeable info [b]; NOR [c])

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Criterion 3 (addresses all main aspects of topic [a]; well-focused [b])

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Criterion 4 (no undue weight)

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Looks fine here.

Criterion 5 (stable)

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Stable is looks indeed.

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Looks good here.

Overall comments

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The edit history tells me that you didn't do a great deal of work on this article. I must say, nice find! I'll put this on hold for a week or so to give you time to work on this, although I'm sure it won't take so long to patch up. --Starstriker7(Talk) 22:07, 2 July 2011 (UTC)Reply

Actually, I did do most of the work. For a time, I edited under the name Viennaiswaiting to see what it was like being a new user and get a fresh new start. I'll get these issues in a minute. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 23:51, 2 July 2011 (UTC)Reply
Alright, I think that should do it! :) --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 00:34, 3 July 2011 (UTC)Reply
Almost...! You forgot to change "Ca Mau" into the Vietnamese spelling in a few places, and I also replied to your comment regarding the first sentence in the lead; I still don't feel so good about it. Otherwise, you've addressed everything else. :) --Starstriker7(Talk) 07:30, 3 July 2011 (UTC)Reply
I won't push my lead concern any further. It won't affect the GA review, so no worries.
I'll pass the article momentarily. Congrats on another one. :) --Starstriker7(Talk) 05:55, 4 July 2011 (UTC)Reply