Talk:Tropical Storm Chris (1982)/GA1

Latest comment: 12 years ago by TropicalAnalystwx13 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contribs) 00:05, 2 January 2012 (UTC) I'll get to this in just a little bit. – TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 00:05, 2 January 2012 (UTC)Reply

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice,fiction, and lists):  
    See below for comments.
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Lede

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  1. Tropical Storm Chris caused minor flooding along the Gulf Coast of the United States.Tropical Storm Chris caused minor flooding along the Gulf Coast of the United States in September of 1982.
  2. Try not to use the name "Chris" in the lede so much.
  3. There was rainfalls as high as 16 inches (410 mm) in the southern parts and slightly less as the storm progressed northward. — This sentence as a whole is confusing, and the first portion of it is grammatically incorrect.
  4. Elsewhere, impact was limited mostly light to moderate rainfall, though local flooding was reported in Tennessee and Kentucky. — I think you are missing a word here?

Meteorological history

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  1. Around reaching its peak, Chris made landfall near Sabine Pass, Port Arthur, Texas. — "Around when" isn't very "technical". How about "Shortly before (or after)".
  2. After moving inland, Chris initially weakened quickly, and was downgraded to a tropical depression by early on September 12 while centered over west-central Louisiana — I'd remove the word "initially" because it never slowed down weakening.
  3. Fifteen hours after that, a gale warning was released for Port Arthur to Port O'Connor, Texas. — "after that" → "afterwards".

Summary

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I have to say, I am impressed with how well-written the rest of the article is. More points towards your WikiCup count. :-) – TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:30, 2 January 2012 (UTC)Reply