Talk:Tropical Storm Bolaven (2018)/GA1
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Reviewer: Usernameunique (talk · contribs) 21:15, 20 May 2020 (UTC)
Lead
in as many weeks
— Is this anywhere in the body of the article?areas that had already suffered severe effects
— Ditto.at least 11,000 people were evacuated from their homes
— Can you really say "were evacuated"? That sounds like an official declaration that they had to leave.
Meteorological history
was named Bolaven by the JMA
— If the JMA is the Japan Meteorological Agency, this should be clarified.Bolaven's time as a tropical storm was short
— Sounds a bit flowery/editorial.
Effects
Bolaven, known in the Philippines as Tropical Depression Agaton
— That the JMA named the storm Bolaven is discussed in the above section. Why is its second name, Agaton, in this section instead?was the third of three consecutive systems that impacted the Visayas and Mindanao, after tropical storms Kai-tak (Urduja) and Tembin (Vinta).
— Meaning there were no other tropical storms in the world between any of those three?was hoisted
— Meaning a physical flag or something similar?Port closures across the Philippines affected over 3,600 passengers
— Does that include the aforementioned 1,200?Bolaven affected a total of 236,449 families
— What does "affected" mean? Their houses were torn down? Their evening TV program was replaced with an urgent storm-advisory program?two fishermen hailing from Iloilo
— Why not just "two fishermen from Iloilo"?
See also
- You mention how two other storms spanned two seasons, but you don't explicitly state in the article that Bolaven did so itself.
- Whoops, I completely forgot to look over this section. Since the season runs year-round in the Western Pacific, spanning two seasons or calendar years (same thing) isn't rare and not particularly worth mentioning. Replaced with storms that had more similar tracks/impacts, and added the relevant set index articles. ~ KN2731 {talk · contribs} 07:48, 21 May 2020 (UTC)
Overall
- KN2731, comments above. --Usernameunique (talk) 21:15, 20 May 2020 (UTC)
- Done, Usernameunique. Thanks for the review. ~ KN2731 {talk · contribs} 07:48, 21 May 2020 (UTC)
- Looks good, KN2731. Passing now. --Usernameunique (talk) 01:01, 24 May 2020 (UTC)
- Done, Usernameunique. Thanks for the review. ~ KN2731 {talk · contribs} 07:48, 21 May 2020 (UTC)