Talk:Triathlon at the 2012 Summer Olympics – Women's

Latest comment: 8 years ago by MWright96 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 07:49, 24 September 2016 (UTC)Reply

More than happy to review this. MWright96 (talk) 07:49, 24 September 2016 (UTC)Reply

Thanks; I'll be out town until Tuesday so won't be able to respond until then but I'll be more than happy to fix any concerns once I get back. - Yellow Dingo (talk) 09:27, 24 September 2016 (UTC)Reply
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Lead

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  • Remove the wikilinks to celsius and square kilmoetre per MOS:OVERLINK
    Removed

Preview

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  • "Anja Dittmer was competing in her fourth Olympic triathlon, the only women in the race doing so." - woman
    Fixed

Course

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  • Serpentine Road is linked to the thoroughfare in India
    Unlinked

Race

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  • Consider adding the time zone to the start of the race - see MOS:TIMEZONE
    Added
  • "The lead pack joined with the chase pack" - Do you think peoloton should be included to avoid reptition of "pack"?
    Reworded
  • "Due to wet conditions the roads were wet" - Reptition of wet
    Reworded
  • "Nordén and the Swedish Olympic Committee appealed against the result in the Court of Arbitration for Sport (CAS). CAS turned down the appeal and Spirig retained the gold medal" - Try not to have the two sentences end like this.
    I'm not sure what your asking me to do here. Why shouldn't the sentences end like they do and what can be done to fix them?

References

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  • no dead links
  • References 14 & 23 need to have Associated Press added as the agency
    Added

Good read and nicely written. On hold until the points have been actioned. MWright96 (talk) 19:41, 25 September 2016 (UTC)Reply

@MWright96: Thanks for the review. I have responded above. - Yellow Dingo (talk) 03:35, 27 September 2016 (UTC)Reply
@MWright96: I've implemented your final suggestion. Thanks again, - Yellow Dingo (talk) 06:23, 27 September 2016 (UTC)Reply
Can now promote to GA. Note: I've changed the time zone to British Summer Time since it is commonly known by this name in the UK. MWright96 (talk) 06:28, 27 September 2016 (UTC)rReply