Talk:Trevor Bauer/GA1
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Reviewer: Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk · contribs) 02:43, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
I will be reviewing this (more quickly than last time)! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 02:43, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
References
edit- Should there be a date for refs 110 & 111?
Done Can you tell these are the two refs I didn't add myself? — GhostRiver 12:52, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
Lead
edit- ”with pitching, and would often practice” – “with pitching, often practicing”
- ”junior year with a” – “junior year in which he posted a”
- ”but followed this effort” – “but he followed this effort”
- ” Bauer became a free agent after the 2020 season, and chose to sign a three-year contract with the Dodgers that February” – “A free agent after the 2020 season, Bauer signed a three-year contract with the Dodgers in February 2021.”
- ” He led the league in both strikeouts and innings pitched by July 2, when MLB placed Bauer on administrative leave while they investigated assault allegations made against him” – Update to “He led the league in both strikeouts and innings pitched through July 2 but spent the rest of the season on administrative leave imposed by MLB as they investigated assault allegations made against him”
Early life
edit- ”Clarita, and spent” – “Clarita, and he spent”
- Did he graduate early because he didn’t mesh with his teammates? Or did he graduate early because he wanted to start his college career early, and he also happened to not mesh with his teammates?
- Per the source:
"It was enough to make me decide not to play my senior year, regardless of if I had a chance to go to college or not," Bauer said Monday. "So, I'll leave it there."
I changed to "in part because" — GhostRiver 12:52, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
- Per the source:
College career
edit- ” a 2.99 ERA, 105+1⁄3 innings pitched, and was named” – “a 2.99 ERA, and 105+1⁄3 innings pitched, also getting named”
- ”combined again in 2010” – I’d take out again, since not much is mentioned of their 2009 performance other than that they were teammates.
- ” to an unbroken 10–0 record at the start of the season, the best record since the school” - to a 10–0 start, the best record to begin the season since the school”
- ”built to a” – “built a”
- What day was the Gallego error?
- ”over Arizona” – I’d say Arizona Wildcats or the University of Arizona, since it’s not the same Arizona he pitched for later on.
- ” bringing his total record to 28–7” – “gaining a 28—7 record” – more parallel with usurping.
- Hmmm…who’s that guy who won the Golden Spikes Award in 2008? (Sorry, just had to mention it!)
- I was going to make a snide comment about 2010, but at least we can agree on '98! — GhostRiver 13:14, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
Minor leagues
edit- I forget—did anyone seem to think Bauer might go first, or was the consensus that Cole would be the first prospect taken?
- Cole was pretty much universally projected to go first because he had been so consistently strong, whereas Bauer didn't really hop onto the radar until his junior year; added a sentence & ref from ESPN about that — GhostRiver 12:52, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
- ”on July 25, and was” – No comma needed
- ”August 16, 2011” – don’t need the year, since already mentioned.
- ”spring training, and went” – No comma needed.
- ”rotation, and was assigned” – “rotation, and he was assigned”
- ”but was unavailable” – “but he was unavailable”
- Skaggs—are you familiar with him at all? (haha)
- What, no! Who's that guy? Should I have heard of him? ;) (Actually, I'm pretty sure that I found that source while doing research on Bauer and had to add it back into the Skaggs article, because I didn't know who he had been replacing at the Futures Game!) — GhostRiver 12:52, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
Arizona Diamondbacks
edit- This section looks good!
Cleveland Indians
edit- Kind of a long section, might want to divide by seasons. (How many per section is up to you.)
- Done Yeah, I agree — GhostRiver 13:14, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
- I’d have more on 2014—did he start the season in the minors? When and why was he called up?
Added I think I worked on this section the one day that the "expand bio" wasn't working, and I just kind of had to freewheel it — GhostRiver 13:14, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
- ”scoring a leadoff” – “recording a leadoff”
- I’d take out the part about the fielder’s choice—the point is he got his first hit.
- How long was the losing streak?
- ” broken his thumb, but served as Bauer's regular catcher from there, with Bauer” – “broken his thumb. He became Bauer’s regular catcher from then on, with Bauer”
- ”Blue Jays, but suffered” – “Blue Jays, but he suffered”
- ”dropping both games” – I’d put losing, just to be a little clearer.
- ” who managed to turn around the first half of the season for a 10–1 record and 2.60 ERA in his last 14 starts” – “who turned his season around by posting a 10–1 record and 2.60 ERA in his last 14 starts”
- ”32 games, and struck out” – “32 games, and he struck out”
- ”three on Yankees” – “three of Yankees”
- ”that he pitched” – “that he had pitched”
- Glad you had the info about the new slider. It’s stuff like this that makes these articles really informative, as they help explain a player’s sudden improvement.
- Thank you! One thing I've been trying to do in these articles is add a little more meat beyond the stats — GhostRiver 13:18, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
- ”meant to start in the” – “meant to begin the”
- ”His push” – “Bauer’s push” – and then change Bauer to he later in sentence.
- Switch he and Bauer around in the September 22 sentence.
- Not a change for the article, but I never really understood why people got so upset at Bauer for throwing the ball over the centerfield fence at the stadium. Better to do that than throw it full power at a nearby fence and risk injuring someone.
- Yeah, I mean, it is a little immature, but – I love Cliff Lee as much as anyone, and I think people forget all the temper tantrums that he used to throw. Most of those involved beanballing someone! — GhostRiver 13:18, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
Cincinnati Reds
edit- ”Bauer stumbled in” – “Bauer struggled in”
- I’d take out the Barnhart sentence. Probably a little too in-depth to devote that much coverage to him struggling in one start.
Partly done I added a sentence in the pitching section about catchers having to adapt to his style of game, since that was also a point of contention when he was with Arizona — GhostRiver 12:52, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
- ”was tapped to” – “was selected to”
- ”battling 72/3” – “pitching 72/3”
- ”but remained open to” – “but he said he remained open to”
Los Angeles Dodgers
edit- This section looks good!
Pitching style and criticism
edit- There’s a few different places in the article where criticism is mentioned or alleged. I think, for clarity, I would call the section “Pitching style” and create a subsection for the last paragraph, titled “Pitch doctoring controversy”
- ”has been known for” – “has garnered attention over”
Business ventures
edit- This section looks good!
Charitable campaigns
edit- This section looks good!
Political beliefs and social media
edit- I remember reading that he supported Mitt Romney in 2012; might be good to mention that as well.
- Done Took some digging, but there was an article about, you guessed it, a Twitter thread he went on about the 2012 election! — GhostRiver 12:52, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
--- "purporting" is a grammatical error. "a purported" is closer to what is meant. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 72.93.241.135 (talk) 18:21, 1 May 2022 (UTC)
Assault allegations
edit- ”in 2017, and that”
- I assume you meant to ask me to take out the comma? If so, Done — GhostRiver 12:52, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
- I assume you meant to ask me to take out the comma? If so,
Great news; you don’t have to wait nine days for a review this time! Biggest change I found was that 2014 could use expansion; the rest seems like minor stuff. Let me know when you’re done, and I’ll give this another look! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 03:36, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
- Sanfranciscogiants17 Thank you for reviewing such a long article; I've implemented everything that you've suggested! — GhostRiver 13:18, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
- GhostRiver Looks good now; passing. Nice work! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 14:18, 13 September 2021 (UTC)