Talk:Tracy McGrady/GA1

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 17:17, 15 July 2017 (UTC)

Will do. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 17:17, 15 July 2017 (UTC)

• Why is the United States linked in the first sentence? See WP:OVERLINK. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 18:00, 15 July 2017 (UTC)
• " He played as both a shooting guard and small forward. He is a seven-time NBA All-Star, seven-time All-NBA selection, two-time NBA scoring champion, and one-time winner of the NBA Most Improved Player Award. He will be inducted into the Naismith Memorial Basketball Hall of Fame as part of the Class of 2017." why the he 3 times in a row? this continues in the lead, I suggest changing a few to McGrady and the athlete) YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 18:00, 15 July 2017 (UTC)
• What was McGrady's first contract?

Per Basketball Reference, it appears that he signed a three-year rookie contract after being drafted by the Raptors, but I can't tell the exact terms. If you think this information is essential, let me know; otherwise, I'll probably leave out.--Ktmartell (talk) 23:52, 16 July 2017 (UTC)

• "McGrady began playing more under new coach Butch Carter on the condition that McGrady improve his work ethic.[5]" missing a "would" somewhere. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane}
• "Orlando were eventually eliminated by Milwaukee in four games.[18]" "were" to "was to fix the grammar error. Alternatively, you could change "Orlando" to "The Magic". YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 18:00, 15 July 2017 (UTC)
• " Late in the season, McGrady scored a career-high 62 points in a winning effort versus the Washington Wizards.[28] His final averages were 28 points, 6 rebounds, and 5.5 assists per game.[1]" why the rounding? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 18:00, 15 July 2017 (UTC)

There's actually no rounding there. His averages just came out really clean that season, I suppose.--Ktmartell (talk) 23:52, 16 July 2017 (UTC)

• "The series would go to a decisive Game 7, where McGrady came out cold, missing seven of his first shots en route to a 40-point loss.[33]" "seven of his" how many shots? If seven, just say "missing his first seven shots" or something. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 18:00, 15 July 2017 (UTC)
• What were his numbers in 2005-06 and 2008-09? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 18:00, 15 July 2017 (UTC)
• "In 2009–10, McGrady played in only six games for Houston.[1]" specifically why? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 18:00, 15 July 2017 (UTC)
• How did he play for the Pistons and Hawks? Trade? FA? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 18:00, 15 July 2017 (UTC)
• "weighing 210 pounds (95.3 kg)" why rounded to 3 figures here but only 2 in the infobox? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 18:00, 15 July 2017 (UTC)
• Make sure all reference dates were consistent (ie all MDY). YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 18:00, 15 July 2017 (UTC)

All in all, a decent article. Well written just needs slight fine tuning in some places. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 18:00, 15 July 2017 (UTC)

I will work to make these revisions over the course of the week. Thanks for taking a look.--Ktmartell (talk) 23:39, 16 July 2017 (UTC)

Alright. I think that everything is done, with the exception of a couple of points that may not require any action. I'll continue tweaking through Saturday, so let me know if I need to correct anything else!--Ktmartell (talk) 00:49, 21 July 2017 (UTC)