Talk:Tony Renna/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Usernameunique (talk · contribs) 06:00, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

Lead

• finishing second at the United States team — for the United States team?
  • Done MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 7 April 2020 (UTC)
• was driver coach — was a driving coach? was the driving coach?
  • Chose the latter option MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

Early and personal life

• As a child, he was a batboy for the New York Yankees baseball team — When they played in California? Or in New York?
  • That is not stated in any of the sources MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 7 April 2020 (UTC)
• Jim O'Bryan ... asked if Renna was interested in driving in Europe — When?
  • Added MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 7 April 2020 (UTC)
    • I mean when did O'Bryan ask?
      • Have added that information MWright96 (talk) 19:02, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

Junior career

• This would be much easier to read if given one or two subsections.
  • Added three subsections MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 7 April 2020 (UTC)
    • That's looks far better, thanks.

IndyCar Series career

• an agreement for Renna to drive for PacWest's CART team failed — Why?
  • The reason was not given by the team MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 7 April 2020 (UTC)
• Might want to state that Al Unser Jr. drove for Kelley Racing when he is first mentioned in this section.
  • Added MWright96 (talk)
• and to partner 2003 IndyCar Series champion Scott Dixon — Partner with?
  • Done MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 7 April 2020 (UTC)
• Is there a natural point to add a subsection?
  • Moved some information to the prior subsection in the article MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

Death

• without having made any prior collision against the trackside SAFER barriers — Is the significance of this that they were unlikely to be damaged before he hit them?
  • Yes, that is the case MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

Overall

• Looks good, MWright96, very little to point out. A few of the sections do look like walls of text; using subsections, or even adding some more photographs, would help. --Usernameunique (talk) 06:00, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

• Great, passing now. --Usernameunique (talk) 19:08, 7 April 2020 (UTC)