Talk:Tissue bank

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Doddsrac in topic Suggested Revisions

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Tissue banks aren't just for storing human tissue - there are tissue banks for animal and plant tissues too. This article could be improved by incorporating this. Teacher was here (talk) 12:31, 18 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

Suggested Revisions edit

Great job on your additions to the article! The lead of the article gives a good sense of what the article is about (though I think that the first citation could be better if it was from a peer-reviewed scholarly journal). 
 For more specifics: -There does not appear to be any citations in the “Willed Body Donation” section of the article. This section was a bit confusing for me. I think that more could be expanded on for what a will is, more information about cadaver tissue, and what Willed Body Donation programs actually are. There are many areas of the article that could be linked to other existing Wikipedia Articles (such as: cadaver tissue, transplant, Uniform Anatomical Gift Act, cremation, donation, Michigan State University, etc.) -The “Donating a Body” section appears to focus only on Michigan, while the rest of the article refers to the entire United States. Another source/more citations would also make this section stronger. I feel as if this section could be combined with the organ donation section, to be the first heading, and then “Willed Body Donation” could be a subheading of the donation section. -The procedures section was very strong. I would only suggest that there were more citations. -The uses section was also good. This could be expanded to make it stronger. In the introduction, it says that the tissue banks collect human remains for research and education. Specific examples of this or just more information on this would add to the article overall. -The costs section also seems as though it would fit better as a subheading for “Procedures.” Cost is mentioned in this section, so I think it would flow better if “cost” was a subheading of “Procedures” or if the “costs” heading was removed entirely and the information added to the procedures section. -The “Ethical Considerations” section was really strong! The only thing I found confusing was the sentence “Although doctors unanimously agree that willed body donations are important for teaching and learning purposes, in one survey, 52% of male doctors consented to donation of their own body and only 29% of female doctors consented.” I also think that the study should be more specific like saying “A study done by …”. Though, great job with this section!

There’s also a small error under references, where the references are cited directly below the heading. This doesn’t have to be there :) Great job!!Doddsrac (talk) 21:46, 6 April 2017 (UTC)RachelReply