Talk:Tim Hughes (soldier)/GA1

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Nominator: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 05:17, 14 June 2024 (UTC)Reply

Reviewer: Ykraps (talk · contribs) 18:48, 15 June 2024 (UTC)Reply

I'll take a look at this over the next few days. --Ykraps (talk) 18:48, 15 June 2024 (UTC)Reply

Earwig reports copyvio unlikely [[1]]
I removed a few duplicate links. Those remaining are repeated from the lede, which is acceptable.
Images appear to be appropriately licensed.
As he died at such a young age, it’s probably best to add cause of death to the lede.
Do we know the content of his grandfather’s testimony to the Royal Commission?
... first Aboriginal woman from South Australia – As south is capitalised, this refers to the state presumably? Does it need a link, do you think?
Link Yorke Peninsula
...he put his age up by two years from 20 to 22 years of age – Doesn’t need years of age at the end
Nazi Germany probably needs a link but this will cause a WP:Sea of blue. Also, overran France, Belgium and the Netherlands is a bit WP:Easter eggy. To solve both problems, you could write - In May and June, Nazi Germany overran France, Belgium and the Netherlands during the Battle of France, and the decision was taken...
...the Salisbury Plain – Definitive article not required and in fact, very unusual.
The 18th Brigade was preparing to deploy to Greece as part of the Allied deployment to assist the Greeks against an expected Axis invasion when German advances in Cyrenaica resulted in the its deployment to the Libyan port of Tobruk as part of the garrison, the famous “Rats of Tobruk” - I found quite a long sentence. Can we break it up a bit? at least in two.
Is Battle of Salient the name of the battle as used in sources?

Do we know why Hughes had a stay in hospital in mid-December?
Link Adelaide
Link Brisbane
Is the disused Buna airstrip the same as Buna Airfield?
Link corporal
Link discharged to Military discharge
Hughes, who was a strict Methodist, held services at their home – There’s probably nothing wrong with it but the mix of singular and plural here sounds wrong to my ears. What about, held services at the family home?
Link mortgaged to Mortgage law
What is the Lands Department? Can we have a single sentence explanation or footnote?

@Peacemaker67: that's all Ive got for now. --Ykraps (talk) 18:15, 17 June 2024 (UTC)Reply