Talk:Thornwell Jacobs/GA1
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Reviewer: Whiteguru (talk · contribs) 01:18, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
Starts GA Review; the review will follow the same sections of the Article. --Whiteguru (talk) 01:18, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
Observations edit
- The Lede is generally expected to be of two or three paragraphs.
- Adult life could incorporate more material from Reference 1. It is a bit too thin.
- It may be better to include (for your reader) who James Edward Oglethorpe is. A reader will have no idea of his significance until you tell them.
- Reference 6 gives significant information about the University, its design, construction and re-founding. It is odd that the University is not mentioned more in this article.
- The main part of this article appears to be principally about the Crypt of Civilization which has its own article.
- My sense is that this article is an after-thought and tacked onto the Crypt for Civilisation. This article fails to be broad in its coverage and needs to include more detail from the life and works of Thornwell Jacobs. WP:GANOT point 3b gives the following guidance:
--Whiteguru (talk) 04:46, 21 March 2021 (UTC)Point (b) raises two issues. First, the article should avoid undue emphasis on tangents, such as coatracks, and trivia. The inclusion of details and minor aspects can contribute to good writing, but such details should not overwhelm the article. Second, the level of detail of each aspect of the topic should be appropriate to the article and kept in balance: where an aspect of the topic involves information which is or could be covered in more detail by another article, the article itself should summarize this information with suitable links, where appropriate.
