Talk:Thomas Edward Knowles Stansfield

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Noswall59 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Thomas Edward Knowles Stansfield/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Cwmhiraeth (talk · contribs) 18:27, 31 July 2017 (UTC)Reply

First reading

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In general, this article is well written and well referenced. I usually look at the lead last, so as to check whether it is a good summary of the rest of the article.

  • "he had a brother, William Walker Stansfield" - it is not clear who "he" refers to here.
  • In fact the first sentence in this section is too long and complex and should be divided.
  • "The family were ..." - "Family" is a singular noun and so the verbs in this sentence need to be in the singular.
  • "The post-war years" - Having not previously mentioned a war, you need to specify which one you are referring to.
  • "The post-war years and their changes frustrated him, spurring his retirement." - So when did he retire?
  • Returning now to the lead, it seems to be a good summary of the main text and in fact mentions the date of retirement.
  • It would be nice to have an image of him, is there nothing available?

GA criteria

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  • The article is well written and complies with MOS guidelines on prose and grammar, structure and layout.  
  • The article uses a number of reliable third-party sources, and makes frequent citations to them. I do not believe it contains original research.  
  • The article covers the main aspects of the subject and remains focussed.  
  • The article is neutral.  
  • The article was created in April 2017 by the nominator and is stable.  
  • No images are available.