Talk:This Kiss (Carly Rae Jepsen song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 11:39, 10 February 2013 (UTC)

Info box

• Use the release date and length templates, like on "Phresh Out the Runway"
  •  Done - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 18:19, 13 February 2013 (UTC)
• I'd put the music video link as an External link at the bottom of the article, I think they make the Info box looked messy lol
  •  Done - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 18:19, 13 February 2013 (UTC)

Lead

• "who perceived the song's potential." → This makes no sense
  • Take a look. - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 18:19, 13 February 2013 (UTC)
• "it failed to achieve similar impact to" → it failed to match the success of her previous singles
  •  Fixed - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 18:19, 13 February 2013 (UTC)
• "October 26, 2012" → you need a comma after 2012
  •  Done - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 18:19, 13 February 2013 (UTC)
• "To promote the song, the singer performed it in few programmes, including at The Ellen DeGeneres Show, at the Late Show with David Letterman, and at the American Music Awards of 2012." → To promote its release as a single, Jepsen performed "This Kiss" on 'The Ellen DeGeneres Show, the Late Show with David Letterman and at the 2012 American Music Awards.
  •  Fixed - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 18:19, 13 February 2013 (UTC)

Critical reception

• Lots of quote usage, try and put some into your own words, or cut down the amount of quote used and combine it with your own words.
  • Take a look, I tried to paraphrase a bit also before the article was nominated, because it was a WP:QUOTEFARM.

Chart performance

""This Kiss" failed to achieve impact similar to" → This needs changing again

• •  Fixed - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 18:19, 13 February 2013 (UTC)

Music video

• ""the music video for THIS KISS is coming soooo soon!" → Don't SHOUT
  •  Fixed - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 18:19, 13 February 2013 (UTC)

Live performances and usage in media

• American Music Awards of 2012 → 2012 American Music Awards
  •  Fixed - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 18:19, 13 February 2013 (UTC)

References

• FN2: 4Music, capital 'M'
  •  Fixed - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 18:19, 13 February 2013 (UTC)
• FN5: You don't say the country of the iTunes Store but do on FN43 and FN44?
  •  Fixed - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 18:19, 13 February 2013 (UTC)
• FN35/36: Don't SHOUT
  • I can't change those, they are automatically generated by Wikipedia through Template:Singlechart. - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 18:19, 13 February 2013 (UTC)

Status

On hold for 7 days.  — AARON • ^TALK 16:52, 13 February 2013 (UTC)

Passing :)  — AARON • ^TALK 20:06, 13 February 2013 (UTC)

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